|Joined: ||Sat Oct 8th, 2005|
|Location: ||Salem, Oregon USA|
Mike, I like the third verse. The ending brings it back to today.
However, if I may interject a thought.....The rhythm of verses are not what I have been able to "get". I know the melody makes the song too, but the beats per line are throwing my sence of balance off. I would like to hear how it would be sung , as the pauses sometimes make the rhythm work. I am just a control freak,and free verse is not my best road to travel. Good Luck.
Debbie, this is pretty standard meter on this one. If you can't get it, then try clapping your hands to a good, uptempo R&B Gospel beat and the words should flow pretty good.