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|Posted: Mon Apr 24th, 2006 11:28 pm||
|Mike, I like the third verse. The ending brings it back to today.
However, if I may interject a thought.....The rhythm of verses are not what I have been able to "get". I know the melody makes the song too, but the beats per line are throwing my sence of balance off. I would like to hear how it would be sung , as the pauses sometimes make the rhythm work. I am just a control freak,and free verse is not my best road to travel. Good Luck.
~Silver Bells Debbie~
My brain is like a wet sponge~stuff leaks out as soon as it's added!:}
Debbie Dant (alias Miraclebaby)
20 Year survivor May 2013)
2x Breast Cancer Survivor