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 Posted: Tue Apr 6th, 2021 05:13 am
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RainyDayMan



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That's a sweet song. Nice melody and finger picking.
I think it holds together well. The "Rain or Shine" is only loosely woven to the story but it still works.

You might consider switching "little girl" > "girl"
when I first heard that line I thought it was referring to his daughter, but after that it seems more like his wife.

I'd try dropping 'The' and make it:
Signs and pictures
to give it a little more room there
and if you wanted an internal near rhyme you could try:
store front windows
but doors sounds good as it is.

Enjoyed it! :)



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