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 Posted: Thu Jan 21st, 2021 11:08 am
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derrickhand300



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Hard to give criticism on this because its PERFECT!
My favorite part of the song are the first two paragraphs ( they made me want to read more)
You've led a double life
your heart is torn in two
lost sight from all the good
you believed that you once knew

fell to the sins of man
you've been led astray
allowed the black and white
blend into a hazy grey


This is the first of yours i've seen= I knew they would be good because of the feedback you offer other-But Its PERFECT

You've led a double life
your heart is torn in two


Heart being torn in two and double life seems to have a greater meaning than the sum of its parts- that makes it special

Last edited on Thu Jan 21st, 2021 11:13 am by derrickhand300



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