View single post by RainyDayMan
 Posted: Fri Oct 16th, 2020 09:15 am
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I like it Mike! Less plaintive and more assertive.
Definitely got some energy to it. I can imagine it singing well.

I really like those opening lines. There's a strong rhythm to them. You might adjust those after the chorus to match:
There’s a big love in town
That hasn’t got around to bein’
of course that only fits how I hear it my head!

And I like the shorter lines in the chorus. Nice contrast and offers the singer room to move.

Good stuff.

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