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 Posted: Sat Aug 15th, 2020 07:06 am
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RainyDayMan



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It's a good one J.D.!
Can definitely imagine this one playing on the radio.

I like that you keep coming back to:
That ain’t what I’m into
hammer it home!

In the chorus, these two lines struck me as being different in that they don't obviously revolve around her
Drivin’ around town
Playin’ Def Leppard real loud

you could possibly amend them like:
Drivin' her around town
She loves Def Leppard real loud

And in the last line of v2 I think you've just missed a word and it's meant to be:
That guys try every time
or something like that.

But overall it's a good one!



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