|View single post by RainyDayMan|
|Posted: Fri Aug 14th, 2020 11:53 pm||
|I like the overall feel of this.
The chorus feels strong, and I like "Never forget this summer" as a hook and title.
I think talking about the relationship ending in v2 is too early. I'd go for:
- how it started it June
- how it blossomed in July
- how it ended in August
which is already close to what you have
The bridge works well though. I'd let that be the point where the listener hears things are ending.
Wonder what to make so long to get
That line feels out. Maybe:
Why'd it take so long to get
I like the repeat on:
Still be friends...
that's a kidney punch right there!