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 Posted: Fri Jul 10th, 2020 08:40 pm
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MASempine



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I am new and don't know anyone's style or perspective or anything much about you folks.

I really like the chorus. "Determined" acknowledges that God is in control although it could NOT MEAN THAT to the writer. I wouldn't be comfortable with the rest of the song. Even if it's meant to get you back to that really good chorus, I think it can be improved. My method of improving my lyrics is to go on a car trip and sing them over and over about 100 times. Of course I've missed a few turn-offs but the time flew by.



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