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 Posted: Tue Mar 3rd, 2020 04:10 am
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cmaja



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This is very good, Andrea. I feel it needs to be tightened up and smoothed out a bit. For example:

You've led a double life
your heart’s torn in two
You’ve lost sight of the good
that your heart once knew

And:

Chorus
Don't you know
He understands your faults
don't you know
He forgives all your sins
don't you know
when your heart is true
He’s always beside you

Capitalize He when referring to our Lord.

And:

Bridge
Where there is fear
there is condemnation
where there is doubt
there’s self-accusation
where there is faith
there’s heaven above
where there is God
there is love

And the like. But overall it’s very moving.

Charles



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