View single post by M.P. Dudash
 Posted: Sat Jan 11th, 2020 01:39 pm
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M.P. Dudash

Joined: Mon Apr 24th, 2017
Location: Ohio USA
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Alan, lots to work with here. I like the title, lines and overall idea. I am however wondering if you left out a chorus before the I had big dreams line? This verse seems to read much slower than the first two. Overall all I like it, just a tweak or two and you’ll be there.

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