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Like that opening. Both visual, and get's you right into that 'travelling song' vibe.
That refrain 'Send me down the line" works a treat
Great drifter song.
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I wasn't sure about this at the start, but it grew on me.
I like how you're applying "don't break the law" in different contexts. Gives the song somewhere to go, and broadens the message too.
Nice! Keep 'em coming Guy.
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That's a bit special. Love the tone and atmosphere of this.
One to be proud of.
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It's hard to pull off a song like this without it sounding crass or insensitive.
I think you're on the right track by writing it from their perspective. Laughing at themselves, rather than being laughed at is definitely the right approach.<…
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"Swear we’re deep, dodge the dive" love the alliteration in that!
Yeah v2 has got the rhythm nailed. The others and chorus not quite, but that's a Suno issue not yours. V2 shows it can work.
Better to laugh at human behaviour than des…
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Well I don't know what it is that you just can't stop. But maybe that's intentional to keep you guessing?
It reads like a love gone wrong song, but with the focus ...elsewhere. And the ending seemed a little odd, listening to the radio.
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News said “Be scared tonight” - that's a strong line! And a truth to boot I think.
Another for your outlaw album. 😀
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"What D'You Think of That?" is a great title and hook! And if feels very down to earth and relatable.
"And your stunning back" doesn't quite land for me. Maybe more like "sliding down your back"?
When it gets to "Intelligent plans, el…
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Pardon me, have to step out to untwist my undies! 😀
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A bit disconcerting to have commercial success I think, which doesn't mean you shouldn't write it or it doesn't have value. Certainly makes you think!
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We're not going to argue about the Epstein files here. If we do I'm closing the thread.
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Watch out Elvis! You're using the same musical notes as everyone else!
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I didn't like the way the 3rd line is squashed into the 4th in the first verse:
...blue sky,
Feel the warmth...
which is probably also what you meant when you said it's a little rushed.
The sort of octave jump in the first…
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Yep, soul version sounds good to me.
Not sure the metaphor about the weather is clear. I can't work out if he's hoping for sun or rain, or how they represent his current feelings and state of mind.
"There will never be rain inside my …
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I think jgkojak has made it clear that he's heard your point and doesn't agree with it. There's no point labouring it, doesn't help anyone.
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"Thin skin nation, walkin’ on eggshell streets" that's a brilliant line!
This song itself might be a bit serious for the message. Maybe try embedding some lighter lines in there?
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Love the lyric. Sentimental look back at growing up in the country.
Drifting on the breeze like a dandelion is a great way to capture the feeling.
Not sure Suno has quite got this one right, but the feel and atmosphere is all there.
Very topical! You'll have to self-publish though! Can't imagine a production company taking this one on!!😂
All about the sound for me. The lyric is fine, but it's the music that gets me in.
Really enjoyed that! Both versions :)
I can so imagine this going down a treat at an open mic or something like that.
Just fun to listen to!
"She don’t dig through the wreckage of me" oh that is lovely!
There's a softness to the music that fits the lyric like a glove.
"I don’t cross old names" maybe "I don’t cross old flames"?
"Close to her, far from me" nice! Like …
What I get from this is numbness, almost like shock. Inability to process.
It is wonderfully atmospheric, and yet the driving beat gives it energy too. Lovely contrast to the vocal.
I think you've done particularly well on this track.…
Lovely to hear this built out the way you no doubt imagined it originally. It's a really good sound.
I can also image this done in a slow, sad way too.
Good stuff. 😁
Too long since I heard your voice Chris! Love this, and love the sound.
And that's some decent guitar playing you're doing too!
Trouble with being no one is it leaves only the brown tongues talking!
Great song!
Interesting story!
I really like these lines:
Said, “I’ve seen saints do worse than this
With a Bible and a sword”
I think if you're doing a live version of this you need a pause after son as in "Son …
I like the song, but I don't like the title. The lyric is all about the Moon. Why not call it Moonstruck or something like that instead?
And these lines don't work
But, the star she thought she found
Turned out to be …
I wonder if it might be a tighter start if you reverse the first two lines?
Travel under cover of night
Trying to run and hide
I feel like the chorus could make more out of the long arm of the law. In what …
Wow! Doesn't a full accompaniment make a difference? Love the flute in the intro, but all the instruments add to it.
The music is quite laid back, atmospheric. Feels like looking at a landscape, which makes it a great match for your lyric!<…
It is catchy. I didn't get the relevance of the middle 8 to the rest of the lyric, but it certainly sounds good. It's fairly light, but then some songs are and no worse for that.
Hi Paulina! Lovely to hear from you.
It's a wonderful song, and I enjoyed your version of it. (Good clean recording too!)
Not surprised to hear you're getting requests to sing it!
Howdy, Stranger!