No pages left to turn
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[verse 1]
The cops, are bangin' on one door,
the Mob, are bustin through another.
I'm stuck between this circus,
got nowhere left to go, because.
[verse 2]
Played both ends, against the middle,
now I'm the piggy, in you know where.
Placed the money, on a busted flush,
want their cash, an' now they're here.
[chorus]
No pages left to turn,
I've run my race, I'm tired.
Thanks for stayin' with me,
what's next, is what will be.
[verse 3]
Sue's been with me, since the start,
we've both had our money's worth.
She's just someone, I picked up,
no need, that she gets hurt.
[chorus]
No pages left to turn,
I've run my race, I'm tired.
Thanks for stayin' with me,
what's next, is what will be.
[verse 4]
Mob got me first, tied me to a chair,
Threw Sue down, had no use for her.
Boiled water, not for a cup of tea,
no money, then it's goin' over me.
[chorus]
No pages left to turn,
I've run my race, I'm tired.
Thanks for stayin' with me,
what's next, is what will be.
[bridge]
Saw Sue reach under the bed,
gangsters had their backs to her.
A gun, two shots, the goons went down,
tied them up, an' called the cops.
[final chorus]
No pages left to turn,
I've run my race, I'm tired.
Thanks for stayin' with me,
what's next, is what will be.
[outro]
The Judge, ruled self-defence,
he had no love, for the Mafia.
I turned States evidence,
we disappeared in Alaska.
Comments
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@sidshovel - cool song.. i like how it flows.. tells a great story.. wish I could write conversationally like this
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Thanks Bill, you've nothing to prove with the lyrics you have already shared. Why not have a go, I experiment all the time, mostly to wind up RDM, but sometimes because on this forum you can do whatever you want, mostly! Seriously, try it with a couple of verses an' a chorus, bang it through Suno an' post it on here. Might open up a whole world for you.
Sid
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Quite the story! I like the piggy in the middle wording! And the outro works well too.
I feel like the chorus could still be worked on. As a couple of suggestions:
Thanks for stayin' with me → karma's catching up to me
what's next, is what will be → what's next, is what will be, will be
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@sidshovel - I actually do try, then ends up be massively obtuse and abstract, then have to clean it up :)
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You're right, the chorus is a bit too soft.
The two lines you picked out are prime candidates.
'catching up to me' is good in the context, but maybe not karma--"fate's", "my past's"?
thinkin', 'what's next, is what will be, will be'
"what's next, is what will be, we'll see" fatalism/expectation!
Good spot, appreciate the input, will change the master.
Thanks,
Sid
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Damn Sid, that's a dark story. I knew I liked you lol.
I'm with Bill I have a real hard time writing about things I haven't actually experienced or know about firsthand.
Not sure why but i couldn't make it loud enough to hear very well, might be on my end tho. Cool story, cooler song.
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It's easy to get distracted during the flow of creation and start to veer back into your comfort zone. Always happens to me near the bridge for some reason. I want to take it one way but feel I'm getting dragged in another.
Might be on your end Barry, SoundCloud plays o.k.
If I experienced everythin' I wrote about, I'd be too tired to write on this forum, that's for sure.
I read somewhere that there were only about 7 themes you could use for writing a love song.
That got me thinking to concentrate less on the theme and more on the other factors, e.g.
geography, circumstances, pov, people, etc. This opens up a whole world of opportunities for your imagination to wander. One song I posted recently, I got off a biscuit tin, a souvenir from a visit to London had a picture of a horseguard outside Buckingham Palace. Typical setting, everyone's seen, but I thought, what is the guard thinking!
What's goin' through his mind while tourists take selfies? So I created a trauma which is believable and at the same time in direct contrast with the role he is currently playing.
You need to project yourself inside that guard and feel what he is feeling, try it, be the President,, or how about the lady who empties the trash can in the Oval Office.
Sid
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I get it Sid. I will try, I have tried, and I guess I have written a couple that were not from my experiences, but it doesn't come to me as easily as the other way round.
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Just never stop writing your great songs Barry, however and whatever you do, works for you and it shows.
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