Woke up feeling like I need to be around other songwriters

So I joined. Is this site real or happening as we say?


So I have a test, how does my writing strike you?


https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-wqR0t0E88A


https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=fInNyfQNSs0

Comments

  • Welcome @BigTexasMike! Nice to have you with us.

    The site has been a bit quiet lately so not sure if we are "happening" right now, but certainly keeping it real 😀

    Hope you enjoy your time here!

    For the future, I'd suggest posting each song individually (and only 1 per day please) so that you can keep track of any feedback & suggestions without having to figure out which comments are for which song.

    It's helpful to post the lyric here on TSF along with your link if you would like feedback on the lyrics.

    I've Fallen For You

    You've got the style down pat. Feels like a Texas cowboy song right from the first note and throughout.

    "I've Fallen for You" is the most memorable line, and that's as it should be given it's your title.

    I think it needs some fresh angle or memorable images though to differentiate it from other similar songs. I feel like I've heard all those lines before somewhere. It's not bad, just a little generic.

    At the moment the song is very much about the singer "I" rather than the person addressed "you". That's not bad either, just a style choice, but if you are looking for somewhere to take the song, perhaps focus on some of the attributes that made the singer fall for them.

    They Don't Make A Love Song Like They Used To

    Again, strong traditional country feel, you've nailed that.

    "They Don't Make A Love Song Like They Used To" is a great hook and title. Don't know if it's been used before or not, but it doesn't matter, there are many duplicates out there.

    "Never tasting the fruits of passion" - that's another strong line, very evocative!

    Overall, this one feels more like your own unique song with your fingerprints on it.

    "This is where the outlaw rides away" is a perfect line to end on.

    These are obviously work tapes rather than final production mixes, but if you are able to record with a little less reverb/echo that might make your sound a little clearer.

    Good stuff.

  • I agree pretty much with RDM's comments. These songs sound like work in progress to me. I can imagine them with a full band arrangement. Okay as they are, but would benefit from some accompaniment.

    Yeah this site is very much 'real and happening' in my humble opinion. Maybe a bit quiet still since the relaunch, but it's looking better and it's a great place to be.😀

  • RainyDayMan and ChrisPrice I'm happy to have found a little hangout. Good to know I'm not crazy that I once had something or still have something. You know what I mean? So much talent out there from stuff of yours too, just needs to be developed and put in fertile ground. Okay, that was the test (throat clear) I needed and response. Can't tell you what it means to have you out there!

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