Leave with me

carroll

Leave with me
verse
I’ve seen the way he puts you down.
when he’s around his friends.
I think that you deserve better.
than what you have with him.
pre chorus
You can do better, you can do better
you can do better than him.
chorus
So hey girl, give me a whirl.
I’ll treat you like a queen.
I’ll treat you like you deserve.
Sweet baby, leave with me.
verse
I’ve seen the way he eyes the girls.
when you’re sitting with him.
I know he’s gotta be crazy.
cause you’re finer than them.
pre chorus
You can do better, you can do better.
You can do better than him.
Chorus
So hey girl, give me a whirl.
I’ll treat you like a queen.
I’ll treat you like you deserve.
Sweet baby, leave with me.
verse
He buttz in when you try to talk.
Makes jokes and laughs at you.
He acts as if you’re ignorant.
I hate how he treats you.
pre chorus
You can do better, you can do better.
You can do better than him.
chorus
So hey girl, give me a whirl.
I’ll treat you like a queen.
I’ll treat you like you deserve.
Sweet baby, leave with me.
tag
I’ll treat you like you deserve.

RainyDayMan

Nice! Feels pretty together. I particularly like the pre-chorus.

I'm in two minds about "So hey girl, give me a whirl." It feels a bit light and flippant, but on the other hand, it's a nice internal rhyme and also fits with "deserve" so it does seem like it fit's that spot. Maybe one to listen to first before making any decisions.