When your gone, your gone

Inspired by Renee's comment that her Father told her when your dead, your dead

Fun fact, Suno won't let you use the word dead.. so I changed it to gone.

Lyrics as always by me, Music / Vocals that glorious AI :)

https://suno.com/song/b820b5a7-8a4a-48d8-b616-de8e98e73304

[Verse 1]

Sittin' at the bar in my usual seat, sippin' my whiskey

The next I knew, the room got cold and dark and misty

This feller in a black robe took the stool next to me

I says, "Bartender, a drink for my friend and one for me."


[Verse 2]

Well, we got to talkin' and laughin' and havin' a good time

When suddenly these ominous bells started to chime

He pulls out a golden watch from deep in his pocket

Unfolds a scrap of paper, then says, "I’m on his docket."


[Chorus]

Get the most outta life, 'cause when you're gone you're gone

Ain't no comin' back from that final sleep, my friend

Throwin the bones, never know when the Reaper’s gonna call

So live it up now, 'cause when you're gone, you're gone


[Verse 3]

Docket? Boy, you must be smoking that funny stuff

As I was arguin my case an tryin' to call his bluff,

He just stared at me with those dark soulless eyes

Then sharply said, Son, there should be no surprise


[Verse 4]

He then pulls out a leather book with the stuff i've done

His bony finger points and said this is his favorite one

We both shared a laugh, and I really would have to agree

He grabbed me, then said "Son, it's time you came with me"


[Chorus]

Get the most outta life, 'cause when you're gone you're gone

Ain't no comin' back from that final sleep, my friend

Throwin the bones, never know when the Reaper’s gonna call

So live it up now, 'cause when you're gone, you're gone


[Bridge]

Hey man, what about my wife, kids, dog, I've got things to do

You're wife divorced you, took the dogs and your kids hate you,

You got no money, and the bank took your house and your car,

Your lucky to have a friend that lets you live above the bar


[Outro]

So, me an him standin there waiting for the ferry to come

Man, my life wasn't all bad and I wasn't a total bum

He looked down at me, well I 'think he was, was hard tell

And said Son, then suddenly I heard the ferryman yell

Then just like that I'm on the boat he's still on the shore

So the reaper is real and not what i was told in folklore


(Go figure)


Get the most outta life, 'cause when you're gone, you're gone

So live it up now, 'cause when you're gone, you're gone!

Comments

  • sidshovel
    sidshovel merseyside

    Now, that's a good story, a real good story.

    Nice choice of music an' vocals, sat you right across from the pair.

    Enjoyed the different sandwich chorus, broke the flow smoothly.

    Very good descriptive use of lyrics at all stages of the song, impressive.

    Well done, Bill.

    Sid

  • @sidshovel - Thanks.. got the idea from listening to jerry reed, when your hot your hot... tried my attempt at story telling.

  • sidshovel
    sidshovel merseyside
    edited February 2

    @bhengen

    Did a bloody good job of it Bill. If you want to move forward with this style, check out Carrolls songs. He's your man for storytelling.

  • Don't worry what anyone else is doing

    Its a good song Bill , Yup when your dead your dead

  • HummerWisdom
    edited February 2

    @bhengen How did I KNOW before even clicking that you borrowed that from me?! 😍

    OMG!! I LOVE this lyric; the Bridge really takes the cake! Now, for that magical 'push MY button' listen! So happy you put it in country! Great Story Song, Bill!

    And 2:34AM you posted this; you're as bad as me!

    And I agree, in your changing to: when you're gone, you're gone sings better than when you're dead, you're dead but then again, I just might take a stab at it anyway.

    Renee

  • Really good song top to bottom.
  • sidshovel
    sidshovel merseyside
    edited February 2

    If you have a problem with Suno accepting words, e.g. dead, try similar sounding forms such as ded or very similar sounding ones like dad. Obviously, this is only for the lyric box during generation, you just edit it to the correct spelling in thelyrics of the song edit feature afterwards.

    Sid

  • @ElvisNash - Thanks man, coming from you, that means a lot.

  • bhengen
    bhengen usa
    edited February 2

    @HummerWisdom - Thanks, It was written with the country style in mind. I love Jerry reed. he has some funny lyrics and that boy can shred on guitar. here's what i'm talking about - https://youtu.be/nvd24XF8klc?si=a95I8EM2rgfdCBWZ . And you should write your own, it would be curious to see what you come up with..

  • @sidshovel - good idea, but in this case when your gone, sings better than dead..

  • @carroll - thanks for the comment,

  • HummerWisdom
    edited February 2

    @bhengen Good as it gets, Jerry and Chet! And the video smokes! Thank you for sharing. I save it to my Music Truth folder on Youtube!

    This YT came up after the one you shared; too funny "can't say girdle..." "can't say underwear" dirty words! LOL! Hee-Haw!

    Renee

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