New, original song - Flying there

robwills

Here's the latest. What do you think?:

https://gloriousmagicalfields.bandcamp.com/track/flying-there

Lyrics:

I think I'm gonna go flyin'

I'm gonna get it right

I think I'm gonna try

To get the next flight

All the people on the ground

I don't want to be there

I'll be in the sky

And you can wonder why

I found the way to get there

You land

And you got no care

And the people stare

Because you're so weird

Weird

All the people on the ground

I don't want to be there

I'll be in the sky

And you can wonder why

I found the way to get there

RainyDayMan

Strong playing as always.

The lyric is longer in this one, and I like that. Two verses and two choruses. I think you could even put another chorus after the lead break if you wanted to.

This one feels more complete to me.

robwills

Thanks. I just listened to it again. It's ok; just experimental. My next song will be with the new microphone and will be a complete song.

HummerWisdom

@robwills feel the same as RainyDay on this one. Much better structure on this one. Just a thought. It might help you when writing to label V1, V2, Chorus and so on to keep you structured; I do it all the time. Cool guitar as always!

Looking forward to more of what you got!

Renee

ElvisNash

Thats alot better than last one , but your vocal is buried in the mix , I can't hear it