I just wanna be me
[verse]
The walls in my room are closing in.
I can’t seem to find the door.
The weight of the world’s on my shoulders.
I can’t take it anymore.
[pre chorus]
Damn your expectations.
You can’t live life through me.
I have dreams of my own.
Please dad; just set me free.
[chorus]
I don’t mean to disappoint you.
I just wanna be me.
[verse]
The walls in your room have diplomas.
you’re proud of all those degrees.
But the truth is i’m not good in school.
You expect too much of me.
[Pre chorus]
Damn your condemnation
Please just let me be.
I have dreams of my own.
Please dad; just set me free.
chorus
I don’t mean to disappoint you.
I just wanna be me.
[Bridge]
I don’t want to be a lawyer.
Earn a doctor’s degree.
I know it’s family tradition
but I want to be me.
[verse]
The walls in my room are closing in.
I can’t seem to find the door.
The weight of the worlds’ on my shoulders.
I can’t take it anymore.
[pre chorus]
Damn your cynicism.
can’t you leave me be.
why can’t you understand
what it does to me.
[chorus]
I don’t mean to disappoint you.
I just wanna be me
Comments
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This looks to me to be a very well-crafted lyric that should sing really well. What style of music were you thinking of while writing this? I'd love to hear it.
Since this is written conversational between, I assume you and your father, I would suggest one small change
I don’t want to be a lawyer.
Earn a doctor’s degree.
I know it’s your tradition
but I want to be me.
Just my thoughts, the way you have it is fine too.
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Simple, but how many people can relate to this scenario.
As usual, understated but with a gut punch.
A wonderful piece Carroll,
Agree with Barry re put it to music.
Sid
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@carroll - I agree with @Barry I really like the conversational style of writing, and would also be curious to hear this put to music. I also agree @sidshovel Sid, this is a very relatable song.
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Reading this reminded me of a song I loved when it first came out called Father and Son by Cat Stevens, it has come full circle for me as I now am the father in story
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That feels very real. Beautifully written.
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@carroll what a great and universal subject to write about as your title immediately caught my eye. I like that you chose the father/son characters as this is especially a conflict which is timeless.
Your lyric reads very well; nice structure, rhyme scheme and meter. I especially like that you made each Pre-chorus different AND then un-rhymed the Chorus but rhymed 'me' in your Chorus's with 'free' and 'me' from your Pre-choruses. Definitely music-worthy!
Renee
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