Not from this heart
[Instrumental intro]
[verse]
My dad disappeared when I was a kid.
My mom had to raise us alone.
She worked Two jobs but life was a struggle.
without a father in the home.
[pre chorus]
Now out of the blue you roll into town.
like a king reclaiming his throne.
but I haven’t forgotten what happened.
how you left mom and us alone.
[chorus]
But there’ll be no forgiveness;
there’ll be no forgiveness.
Not from this heart.
Not from this heart.
[Instrumental break]
[verse]
I remember the night of betrayal.
The sight of tears in mothers eyes.
How you tried to blame her for your cheating.
How you disappeared in the night.
[pre chorus]
The young ones accept you into their lives.
They’re charmed by your wit and guile.
But I haven’t forgotten what happened.
I’m not fooled by your phony smile.
[chorus]
So they’ll be no forgiveness;
there'll be no forgiveness.
Not from this heart.
Not from this heart.
[Bridge]
It seems that all has been forgiven.
and you’re holding court again.
playing the jester, acting the fool.
but my heart won’t let you in.
[instrumental outro]
Comments
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Sad but nice one. It has a strong emotion. Would love to hear it with music.
I especially like the line: like a king reclaiming his throne.…there is so much anger and pain in this line
Hope I could have been helpful
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You captured the sadness and anger in perfect proportions. Lovely song well told. Flows really well with your usual excellent rhyming schemes. A lovely piece of work up to your usual high standards.
Agree with RK, this one's worth the effort of putting it to music.
Sid
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@carroll so sad, I can only imagine this to be a true story and unfortunately, true for so many. I like the slight turn in your Bridge; forgiven but not forgotten is what it said to me. Some of my favorite lines: "like a king reclaiming his throne." as well as "and you’re holding court again. playing the jester, acting the fool." very cool way of showing!
I always look forward to what you've to say. As a dummy-melody plays in my head; meaning my own melody as your lyrics are well-structured and melody-worthy,
Renee
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Nice one Carroll, came across well with the music/vocals. Good choice for the lyrics.
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That's a strong lyric. Controlled anger comes through loud and clear. Good, clear storyline.
I think the AI has made it a bit too light and melodic for the lyric - needs more growl to it, but not something you have much control over.
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This song gets better every time I listen to it,
Classic, Carroll, push this one, it's special
Sid
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I don’t do anything with them other than post them to my facebook. No one hears one voice in 8 billion. I have a bunch of really good songs and no audience.1
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@carroll when I used to have a FaceBook account, I posted my lyrics there as well. It's funny, we don't think anybody is reading them but I'd run into people around town who never gave a thumbs up or commented who said that they really enjoyed reading my lyrics. This happened more than once or twice, probably five or six times.
And on another note, my friends don't even bother with my songs, hardly; I give 'em my SoundCloud link and once in awhile I text or email a song that I think is one of my better ones and NADA! They're just not interested in what I've to say. Basically, people suck. Thank God for TSF!!
YOU ARE NOT ALONE! 😍
Also, have you tried Facebook Songwriting Groups? You would surely get more action there than on you personal FB page, I would think!
Just thought I'd share that with you,
Renee
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I used to post a lot of places but no longer bother.0
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takes promotion , and your going to pay / How it works . You need to build your self up as a AI artist , it's a lot of work , pics , bio Ect . Thats right there's 20 billion songs , So you got work to get noticed, Sending songs to streaming services is the graveyard , 400 billion songs in there . per Rick Beato
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Speaking of 'song graveyard', just bury me with my songs. I'll be happy!
Renee
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ha ha ha right
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