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| Posted: Tue Jun 26th, 2012 10:52 pm |
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BRANDON WRIGHT
©2012
I COME TO THE ALTER ALONE IN THIS PLACE,
LIFTING MY HANDS.. SEEKING YOUR FACE,
I BOW IN REPENTANCE CALLING YOUR NAME,
LORD, PLEASE FORGIVE ME I GIVE YOU MY PAIN,
(CHORUS)
AND I GIVE YOU MY HEART,
I GIVE YOU MY SOUL,
I GIVE YOU MY LIFE,
I WANT YOU TO KNOW,
THAT I'M COMMITTED TO YOU,
I'M COMMITTED TO YOU,
I COME UNWORTHY YET YOU KNOW MY NAME,
YOU CALL ME HOLY I FALL DOWN IN SHAME,
I'M LOST IN YOUR LOVE I OPEN MY EYES,
YOUR STANDING BEFORE ME MY GREATEST SURPRISE,
(BACK TO CHORUS)
I COME TO YOUR PRESENCE BROKEN, ASHAMED,
I STAND BEFORE YOU AND YOU CALL MY NAME,
IN AWE OF YOUR PRESENCE I FALL TO MY FACE,
LORD YOU FORGIVE ME AND YOU TAKE MY PAIN,
(BACK TO CHORUS)
BRIDGE:
I DANCE TO THE ALTER,
I BOW AT YOUR FEET,
I OPEN MY EYES,
AND I AM COMPLETE,
(BACK TO CHORUS)Last edited on Thu Jun 28th, 2012 03:42 am by bmwrigh
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I'M NOT SURE IF IT'S ACTUALLY SONG WRITING OR
GOD LISTENING BUT EITHER WAY TO GOD BE THE GLORY!!!
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| Posted: Wed Jun 27th, 2012 10:53 pm |
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Nicely written Brandon! If I were to make a suggestion it would be to repeat "That I'm Committed To You" at the end of the choruses. I was actually singing the chorus in my head and it felt right to repeat the line. However, on the repeat it needs to leave out "That" and just say "I'm Committed To You" Just my take on it.
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| Posted: Thu Jun 28th, 2012 03:43 am |
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THANK YOU, IT DOES SEEM A LITTLE BETTER THAT WAY.
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I'M NOT SURE IF IT'S ACTUALLY SONG WRITING OR
GOD LISTENING BUT EITHER WAY TO GOD BE THE GLORY!!!
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| Posted: Fri Jun 29th, 2012 11:46 pm |
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I've been sitting here reading over all your songs posted here in the Gospel section Brandon and so far this one is my favorite. It is indeed nicely written. 
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First you write it with your heart - then you re-write it with your head
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| Posted: Sun Jul 1st, 2012 04:15 am |
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THANK YOU, IT IS ONE OF MY FAVORITES ALSO.
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I'M NOT SURE IF IT'S ACTUALLY SONG WRITING OR
GOD LISTENING BUT EITHER WAY TO GOD BE THE GLORY!!!
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