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 Posted: Sun Jan 15th, 2012 02:50 pm
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Hello everyone. My name is Joel and I love R&B. I have a song here that I would like you all to critique. I entered it into the John Lennon Song Writing Competition so there isnt much I can do about that right now but my team and I at globalbeatsinc are still working on it.

Hold Me Close - Alina (GlobalBeatsInc Production)
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=VWEh_I_pBB8

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 Posted: Sun Jan 15th, 2012 05:39 pm
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 Hey Joel, this is really great stuff! Most excellent!!!

 As you can see, I moved your post from the discussion area to the music database.  I need to get you to post your lyrics here also.  It is a requirement when posting music.

 Thanks!
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 Posted: Sun Jan 15th, 2012 05:50 pm
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Thanks a lot. I'll try to remember the next time I post

Verse 1

Walking Down A Lonely Road
Tryna find my back home
im so lost will you please come and find me

how could i have run this far
when i know i dont belong
my soul is broken
i am in so much pain

but i know you never left me
You were always by my side
even when i feel far away


Chorus

Take my hand
hold me close
dont you let me go
i, i need you
and you love me
so will you hold me close


Verse 2

look into my eyes youll see
everything you mean to me
and all the thoughts im hiding deep inside me

your love is like a hurricane
pouring with the wind and raid
you wash away my sins
and comfort me

but i know you never left me
you were always by my side
even when i feel far away


chorus

Take my hand
hold me close
dont you let me go
i, i need you
and you love me
so will you hold me close


Bridge

i need you
in every way
so much more
everday

Last edited on Sun Jan 15th, 2012 05:56 pm by globalbeatsinc

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 Posted: Tue Aug 14th, 2012 12:41 am
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Well done, Joel!

I like the way you didn't overpower the vocal with the music, yet the music was powerful in its own right.

Good luck in the contest!!!!



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 Posted: Mon Feb 11th, 2013 03:03 pm
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Hi Joel,
Very nice song! Is it available to singers? For possible recording? My daughter has been searching for a song that she not only likes but is appropriate for her as a 13 year old singer. And this song is both!
Let us know, thank you!

Leslie and Nina

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 Posted: Tue Feb 12th, 2013 01:45 am
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That was a REALLY good song. Well written. Well played. Well sung. That was a very complete package in my opinion. One of the very best I've heard on this forum.



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 Posted: Mon Feb 25th, 2013 01:42 pm
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Very nice.. like the structure and like the dynamics of the chorus.. well done



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