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http://indiemusicworks.com/Rob_Young/

http://www.soundclick.com/robyoung2947


"Broken Glass" Copyright 2011 Rob Young


Verse 1


Its been dark around here

like the suns going down

It's all because you

ain't been around


Verse 2


Thought I'd go into town

but that was too hard to do

cuz every place that I went to

reminds me of you


Chorus


People notice they can see it my face

they don't even have to ask

now I'm stuck looking for an answer

and my hearts like a broken glass

feels like a broken glass


Verse 3


Is it something stupid I said?

thats fairly easy for me

but believe me

I didn't want to see you leave


Verse 4


I see your face in my drink

with the drops of my tears

nothing left but to face

my lonely fears


Chorus


People notice they can see it my face

they don't even have to ask

now I'm stuck looking for an answer

and my hearts like a broken glass

feels like a broken glass

Last edited on Sun Nov 25th, 2012 03:38 pm by SongWriter2947

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Really nice mood set with the music, Rob. Nice story, tight lyrics, muted, not overstated. The only part that took me out was 'I see your face in my drink, with the drops of my tears.' I get the image, no question, but I think poetically that one line could be worded better. 'I see' and 'with' seems a little awkward. Not exactly sure what to suggest, maybe 'I mix your face..' or 'I kiss you face...' Seems like it would call for a more physical action than seeing to say 'with the drops of my tears.' But that's just one line and only a little food for thought. Love it. Nice 'noir' piece. Thanks for sharing.

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Rob...

Jamwave won't let me onto the site without a log-in. Any other place I can hear it?

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This sings really easy and well. Finding a tune was just natural while singing it.

And I could find several alternate tunes just as easily. To me that says the lyric is written well and would fit a multitude of tunes.

Very well done imo.

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Hey Rob,

As a Jamwave member I was able to hear this.  Nice groove to this one!

Would you like to post the song on this thread so all can hear? If so send it along to troy@thesongwritersforum.com

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Troy: Thanks I went ahead and changed the link to my soundclick page so people can now listen..I appreciate you offering. Looks like their getting ready to shut the lights off at Jamwave now.

Michael and HardTwistMusic: thanks for your interest and comments on the song. Sorry I didn't respond sooner but I haven't been around in awhile. Anyways a belated welcome to TSF!

- Rob

http://www.soundclick.com/robyoung2947

:Guitarman1:

Last edited on Sun Aug 19th, 2012 02:45 am by SongWriter2947

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You're welcome, Rob. Yes... Jamwave seems to be shutting down the site pretty soon. That's too bad.

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Rob,

Lots of atmosphere here! Simple words, but you blend them into the melody very well. I tweeted you.

Jim

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Thanks Jim appreciate it.

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Geez! I thought I had already commented on this one, Rob! Sorry about that! :( But it sounds great! I have always, always loved your style of music! I really like the lyrics on this one too!!! You did a great job of telling us (and leading up to) why his heart feels like a broken glass. Very nicely done all around, Rob. :cool: Enjoyed listening.

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Thanks Sara.... this one was done about a year and a half ago. A few TSF members have bumped it back up. If I remember right I wrote the lyrics as I created each part of the song and just kind of let it evolve on its own. Thanks for the comments.

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I really like the groove here, Rob. I hear a little bluesy funk in it as well. ;)

Nice lyric too, simple and straightforward.

Donna;)

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Thanks Donna. Falling into a groove thats bluesy funk is one of my favorite things to do. Thanks for listening and commenting.


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