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 Posted: Sun Jun 12th, 2011 04:29 am
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Janke
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6/29/2011 - song no longer posted on Soundclick.

Rough, just an idea, might be ok, might need a first verse, might be just something to hang onto for the melody.  I like the old style of it and the potential for harmony.  As it stands, I suppose the story might be too vague without having some background. 

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After Emmaus
Copyright 2011 Mike Grayson

Some will say it's their imagination
That they saw Him walking on the road
Or it's just another made up story
To be told, to be told

Some believe
What they see

Some believe that they saw Him
They were talking
On the road that day

And with every word their hearts were burning
Everything He said was pure and true
I'm just telling you what what they have told me
You can do what you do

Some believe
What they see

Some believe He was dead and
Now He's living
I'm just telling you

Last edited on Thu Jun 30th, 2011 12:48 am by Janke

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 Posted: Sun Jun 12th, 2011 12:44 pm
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Mike I like it alot. The potential for harmonies is definitely there. Maybe a fiddle in the background too. I think the line "hearts were burning" would read better as "hearts were lifted" and "You can do what you do" sounds a little vauge. Maybe something like "the rest is up to you". Just suggestions the song is already strong so you can keep or sweep the suggestions. Good luck with it.



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 Posted: Sun Jun 12th, 2011 01:27 pm
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Rob - took the line 'hearts were burning' from the Good Book. Wanted the reference. Appreciate the comments, thank you! Yes, I sure can be vague.

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