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 Posted: Sat Oct 16th, 2010 08:32 pm
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tsolanto
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Suddenly... First Draft.. I know I am a little off here and there .. Just looking for thoughts before I finish it.. Thanks

The vocals might be a bit too hot... Thoughts?

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Wasn't expecting this
Quickly declining
Family is near
This is kind of hard
.
.
In the end
I was singing
Praising and hoping
That I'd really see you
Just a heartbeat away
I heard you calling
One last breath
Before the truth
.
Then
.
Suddenly
We meet
Face to face
Suddenly
I fall to my knees
Suddenly
I can really see
That everything is true
I finally see you
.
.
You touch me
Scars still in your hands
Reminds me
How I was such a broken man
Now I'm healed
No words can explain
This feeling
And it happened so.....
.
.
Suddenly
We meet
Face to face
Suddenly
I fall to my knees
I just can’t believe
That it's true
Everything you said
Is True
I finally see you
Suddenly
.
.
We need to be ready
No one knows the time
When we'll break the boundaries
Of this LIFE
.
Suddenly
I fall to my knees
I just can’t believe
That it's true
Everything you said
Is True
I finally see you

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 Posted: Sun Oct 17th, 2010 04:13 pm
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Tom, I hope you won't mind but I moved this one to Gospel Music. Since it's a religious song I thought it might get better exposure if it's posted in the proper music database.

It's a very nice song Tom, When I first saw the lyrics I was a little in doubt about how it was going to play out but as it turns out the music and the way you sing it took care of any doubts. I don't quite understand what you mean about the vocals being a bit to hot, but if you're talking about the way you belt it out when you get to the chorus, then my answer to this is no... it sounds really good to me when you go all out when you reach that part. Nice work and enjoyed listening.  :)



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 Posted: Mon Oct 18th, 2010 01:15 am
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Thanks for moving it... Actually i worked on it after I posted it and toned down the vocal levels and spread out the vox a bit wider in the mix. Thanks for the comments... Glad you like it.. Oh and it was hot on the soft stuff meaning you could hear every breath and even my chair squeak LOL..

 

Thanks again

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