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alytrain Member 
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 I WANT TO COME BACK AS MY DOG© 2010 Amber Train V1: My dog thinks to himself . . . I lie in the sun til time to get fed Take up most the space in their big soft bed Sleep when I feel tired play when I’m frisky I’m naturally happy while my owners needs whiskey CHORUS: Those are things my dog would surely remark If he could use words instead of just bark I’m so jealous when I leave to go work If he weren’t so cute I’d kick’m to the curb V2: My dog goes . . . Sometimes that squirrel Will tease me to death He makes me so nervous but soon I forget Hate it when they leave Then I spy the couch I’m not allowed up but they won’t find me out Chorus: Those are things my dog would surely remark If he could use words instead of just bark I’m so jealous when I leave to go work If he weren’t so cute I’d kick’m to the curb Bridge: My dog says wisely . . . Its true my life’s much shorter in years But I wouldn’t trade Mine for a hundred of theirs Chorus: Those are things my dog would surely remark If he could use words instead of just bark I’m so jealous when I leave to go work If he weren’t so cute I’d kick’m to the curb  Attachment: CRW_5985(4).gif (Downloaded 27 times) Last edited on Fri Jul 23rd, 2010 05:35 pm by alytrain |
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Dusty Demos Member 
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I like it,sounds like the same life my dogs lead! My only nit,the work/curb abstract rhyme is kind of a stretch for me. I tried to sing it,but stumbled on those two words. Good write though. |
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SundownSam Super Moderator 
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Love, love, love this one Amber! I don't have me pooch anymore but I have a cat that would easily fit this bill! She knows she's not suppose to whatever it is she's not suppose to do but she'll do it anyway and defy you to do anything about it! But I love that she's spunky, however, there's times I would also like to kick her to the curb! lol Really like this one Amber, I'm a big fan of humorous writes and this one is as cute as pie!  |
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alytrain Member
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I'm not above posting a shamelessly cute photo of my dog, since I've noticed others (ahem Dustydemo) doing the same. I imagine once I put it to a tune, will have to file some rough spots, as the work / curb rhyme may be. Thanks for the feedback! Last edited on Fri Jul 23rd, 2010 05:37 pm by alytrain |
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SundownSam Super Moderator
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Amber, by all means feel free to post a picture of your little puppy dog. Since he was the inspiration for this lyric I'd put it right here in your song thread! We love seeing pictures here, so post away!  |
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Mike Stacey Member 
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I like this song the title really says it all and from that I could tell it was going to be a funny write nice job |
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terrypicker Member 
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I like the whole idea of the comparative write on this topic. Human's vs. Dog's life; probably reflects many people's thoughts at times. Not to be a SNIT, but I would have liked to see you expound a bit more on the actual Title of the song in the context of the lyric. Perhaps, gear it toward, or include it in the chorus. IMHO, I think it would make the whole song much more memorable, more humorous, and more complete. Hey I'm with Sam, I like Pictures of pets. I just took Rocky off my avatar to show everyone Rick's little music corner. He'll get over it though. I think. |
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blukatnga Member 
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So cute Aly, He's adorable !! Tune shows a really cool lighthearted side to you that you are very good at. It has some metre problems as a song but right now it is a very, very good poem and you did well here. I am always waiting to see what you'll do next for sure !! |
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