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My Lost Love - Revised
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 Posted: Thu May 6th, 2010 08:17 am
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Andy
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I decided to go with four lines this time. Comments?  Thanks.


My Lost Love

 
© Andy Chumbley May 2010
 
Verse 1
My love left me a while back
why, I’ll never know
my heart is sad and broken
losing her love was quite a blow
 
Chorus
She’s not around to hear my plea
so I’ll send a prayer above
I’m sure the angel’s will help me
find my lost love
 
Verse 11
My life has changed, I feel the pain
of the one I lost, the one so dear
emotional wounds are hard to heal
my mind is numb, and not so clear
 
Chorus
She’s not around to hear my plea
so I’ll send a prayer above
I’m sure the angel’s will help me
find my lost love
 
Verse111
One day soon I hope and pray
my dreams will come true
when I can again embrace you
with the love we once knew
 
Chorus
She’s not around to hear my plea
so I’ll send a prayer above
I’m sure the angel’s will help me
find my lost love

Last edited on Sun May 9th, 2010 07:39 pm by Andy

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 Posted: Mon May 31st, 2010 01:01 am
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Hi Andy,

Nicely structured lyric.
I believe this one will sing.

Peace

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 Posted: Mon May 31st, 2010 01:08 am
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Thanks for the nice words but there have been multiple revisions since this one was posted. Please see the one that says "Now I'm happy" for the final version.

Andy

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