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"Don't Have To Be Colorblind, To See That I'm Blue"
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 Posted: Mon Apr 3rd, 2006 12:43 am
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“Don’t Have To Be Colorblind

To See That I’m Blue”

 

V1

Ya’ don’t have to be colorblind to see that I’m blue

Ya’ gotta’ know the kind of man that I was married to

But by the time ya’ realize, the sort of guy he is

It’s time to open up your eyes, or be colorblind like this

Ya’ don’t have to be colorblind to see why I’m  blue

Look closer and you will find all that he has put me through

About the day you feel secure, with his loving little kiss

You’ll look too far and feel so sure, and end up feeling like this

 

Chorus

Ya’ don’t have to be colorblind to see that I’m  blue

Along with other changes, I’m changing this one too

On my list I have written; number one, gettin’ rid of you 

Gettin’ fixed up, dancin’all night, this is number two

Ya’ don’t have to be colorblind to see that I’m blue

Yes, I was once colorblind, but now it’s coming back on you

 

 

V2

Ya’ don’t have to be colorblind to see that I’m blue

But now I’m glad not sad, I made this color just for you

So if you pay any attention you’ll see I just get red

Seems to fit me perfectly when you get into my head

Ya’ don’t have to be colorblind to see that I’m blue 

I found out everything had been a hundred percent untrue

We said our vows together on our day of wedded bliss

But you were very clever turning our lives around like this

 

 

I’m in the pink with someone new

Now I’ve gotten over you

I’ve gotten over you

 

 

Chorus

Ya’ don’t have to be colorblind to see that I’m  blue

Along with other changes, I’m changing this one too

On my list I’ve written; number one, get rid of you 

Gettin’ fixed up, dancin’all night, this is number two

Ya’ don’t have to be colorblind to see that I was blue

Yes, I was once colorblind, but now it’s coming back on you

 

 

Ya’ didn’t have to be colorblind

To see that I was blue

Ya’ didn’t have to be colorblind

Now it’s all coming back on you

On you now it’s on you

 

C2006 Susan Jeffries

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Last edited on Mon Apr 3rd, 2006 02:29 am by Susan Jeffries

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WOW !!!! OMG !!!!!
I told ya it was a perfect match, LOL
Excellent job there Suzie Q !!!!!!
I got chill bumps as I was reading it !!!
And that is hard to do to me !!! LOL

I only see one change I'd make. Is just
my opinion so keep or sweep.

I would end the 2nd verse in a similar
fashion as the 1st verse and not dance around
the:

Yes, I was once colorblind, but(now) it’s
coming back on you

Other than that I think it is PUUUURRRFECTLY
written !!!! Now can't wait to hear it !!!



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Oh you Sweet thing!!! Thanks for sharing with me. I had the same feeling about the 2nd verse....hmmmmmmm, we are both right. Wasn't sure where to take it there. I'm happy it gave you jumping bumps, LOL..:Excited:Let me see if I can get these changes made and get it posted. I'm happy you liked it. It is a great hook (checks in the mail) ;) You're good to me. Thanks for the 4 stars, babe, I need that to keep going...but you know that!!!! Hugs for the comments!!!

Suzie

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Jeff,

The last 2 lines or 4 of the 2nd verse? 2?

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Yea, I'd say 2 ought to do it !!!

Wonder if Dr. Mike has cleaned up my mess yet?? :Really Ticked:

Last edited on Mon Apr 3rd, 2006 01:23 am by Jeff Knight



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okie dokie that's what I thought....thanks again!!!!!

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Susan Jeffries wrote:
okie dokie that's what I thought....thanks again!!!!!
Thanks for what ???

I only had an idea or hook !!!
You were the one who turned it into
the masterpiece. LOL
I should be thanking you !!! LOL



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ok, you win!!!lol :Taz:

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Censored for National Security Purposes!!!

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Jeff, Will do, sounds like a good one. I'll get back at ya' on it!!!!! ;)

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Wow, Susan, you took that hook and ran with it.  Very good job. 



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Thanks Roy,

It was a great hook!!!!!!!!! How could I miss??? Also, when I'm told to write a song, I do it! LOL :D

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Susan Jeffries wrote:
Also, when I'm told to ..... I do it! LOL :D


Wish my wife was like that !!!!!! LOL
HAHAHAhahahahaHAHAHA



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Jeff, maybe ya need to call it writing a song, she may just comply!!!!!!hahahahahaha

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Susan Jeffries wrote:
Jeff, maybe ya need to call it writing a song, she may just comply!!!!!!hahahahahaha

LOL .... hehehehe
You don't know my wife !!!!! ;)
Sometimes I don't even think she does !!!! LOL



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Jeff Knight wrote: Susan Jeffries wrote:
Jeff, maybe ya need to call it writing a song, she may just comply!!!!!!hahahahahahajust give it a new name, something she likes and then jump on her!!!!!!!!!:P

LOL .... hehehehe
You don't know my wife !!!!! ;)
Sometimes I don't even think she does !!!! LOL

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hi Susan

Mai here, Newbie!

Did someone give you the title, then you wrote?

Good job.

I just left a forum that says to NOT overwork the hook in the verses!!

What is your opinion on that?

I was thinking on that vein and wonder if you could find another "color and line" to replace some of the hook titles, as you did with pink and red??

(This is cute and not an abuse song but if it were you could have black and purple and green etc.--)

Anyway, just  a note to introduce myself and say "HI":Angel:

Mai

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Hello Mia,

Nice to meet you. welcome to the forum. I hope you will find the site enlightening.:D
Your question about "overdoing the hook" is a matter of opinion in this case. Yes, I could redo a couple of lines in the verses, and drop the hook, but the hook is something to be remembered, as I saw it here. I believe you have a good point in what you ask.
I'm a writer that does not always follow the rules as tightly as others may. You'll get feedback from a lot of people in any forum, yet you will decide the lyric yourself. The forums are meant to help but not everyone has the same input, if you see what I mean?
I think, as the writer of this lyric, it is finished. Can it be improved by dropping the hook a little, I don't know. I am satisfied with it as is.
You did bring up a good point though! I appreciate all input.
So many people have helped me in the forum with my craft. Sometimes, you have to do what you feel is right for yourself, and your lyric. You often know when the work is not quite right and then the comments can be very helpful. I've been there a hundred times!! lol
It's been nice meeting you.I hope you are happy on this forum, there are a lot of excellent writers here. It's been a delight to meet you, Mia!!!!!!!:) (Yes, I was given this hook by Jeff Knight to write a lyric to) He is one who has helped me a lot.

Susan

 

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hi Susan

So nice to hear from you. Thanks for responding. I have to agree with you.

There are so many opinions about what is "right/correct/whatever" and I asked you what I did to see if you had ever heard that--different people-- different forums--especially when you have a song that fits the question!!!! I gathered as much when no one else mentioned the repetition.

I have been told to NEVER mention my hook in the verses, but I feel it is called for in certain songs. (Read my Truck song and tell me I CANNOT mention a truck in the verses!! lol)

I think we must do what makes us feel the most comfortable, but still be open to the suggestions of others---just in case they happen to have a better idea!

Nice to meet you!

cheers  :Guitarman2:

Mai

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Mia, first most important thing is to breathe and don't limit yourself to strict rules......as I was once told.....

Breathe and write your lyrics....you'd be amazed what you can come up with!!!!! ;)

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