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 Posted: Tue Mar 28th, 2006 02:49 am
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I made a comment to Bobby Joe on another thread and used this line and then it hit me why not a song.  So I wrote this little ditty in about fifteen minutes here in the middle of the night.  Might need tweaking, as it didn't take long to write: *This song is now officially a co-write between myself and Jeff Knight.  Demo to follow, somewhere down the road (Yeah I'm hung up on roads, to somewhere, anywhere but here, back home, you name it) So, here is what we're going with, subject to change when Jeff does the demo.

  
For The Money
By Roy Harris and Jeff Knight



1st Verse:
I made my Friday night rounds 
At the places I usually go
Been working hard all week long
Had some wild oats to sow
I met up with a sweet young thing
Asked her to let's have some fun
She winked and said slip me fifty
I'll show you how it's done

(Chorus)
Ain't in it for the money, honey
Got bills that's way overdue
My old truck needs new tires
The bank loan didn't come through
I see your thinkin'  dollar signs
That's not what I was thinking of
Ain't in it for  the money, honey
I'm only in it for the love

2nd Verse:
I found a soul-mate online
Got married and settled down
I was making a little money that
She was spending  all over town
Then one day when I came home
She met me at the door
Said I needed another part-time job
So she could spend a little more

(Bridge)
(I told her)
I'm not a banker or a broker
Leaves are the only thing green that grows on trees
Since you really like to spend so much
Try earning some 'stead of giving me the 3rd degree

2nd chorus:
(I can see)
You're only in it for the money, honey
My credit card's maxed and overdue
I just wanna pay the bills
Not buy some fashion high-heel shoes
I still see you're thinkin' dollar signs
And baby that's just not right
You're only in it for the money, honey
So I'm outta here tonight. 

Tag:
You're only in it for the money, honey
So I'm outta here.......tonight
Yea, I'm outta here......tonight


 This incorporates Jeff's suggestions and now I am beginning to really like it.
Did I hear someone say Toby Keith wanted this one:Excited:





Last edited on Thu Mar 30th, 2006 02:16 pm by Roy Harris



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 Posted: Tue Mar 28th, 2006 08:31 am
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Hi, Roy.  :)  It flows really well, and I like the peppiness of the chorus.  A very good start, IMHO.  You might want to say what you ARE in it for.  You've got a talent for writing lyrics, for sure, and I can why you have some songs signed.  Good luck with it.  :)

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 Posted: Tue Mar 28th, 2006 09:19 am
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Thanks for the suggestion.  I added a bridge to see if that moves it along.



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 Posted: Tue Mar 28th, 2006 09:30 am
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Roy,

I really like what you have going on here. I would like to take a crack at a melody after I return from Nashville.



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 Posted: Tue Mar 28th, 2006 06:14 pm
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Roy, I like what you have done with this.
Good hook and flows very well.
I would make some minor tweaks
with some clutter words.
Every line that starts with "And"
I would eliminate each "And".

I also agree with Bobby Joe about
saying what you are in it for.
I would also change the last 4
lines of the chorus to:

"I didn't know dollar signs
were attached to the bug
I ain't in it for the money, honey
I'm in it for the love
"

I also think you need a tag or an outro:

I think you have a great start here
and I can't wait to hear music to it. Yea!



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 Posted: Tue Mar 28th, 2006 06:34 pm
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Jeff, I'm OK with your suggesions,  One thing, I don't understand what you mean when you say "Were attached to the bug"  What does that mean? lol
Is this a younger generation thing?  I went ahead and deleted the "ands".  Let me know about the bug thing.  We didn't catch the bug from the gal in the first verse did we:)

 

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 Posted: Tue Mar 28th, 2006 08:58 pm
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Just another thought for consideration:

I didn't see the dollar signs
That's not what I was thinking of
I ain't in it for the money, honey
I'm in it for the love.


 

 

 



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 Posted: Wed Mar 29th, 2006 12:02 am
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Roy Harris wrote:
Jeff, I'm OK with your suggesions, One thing, I don't understand what you mean when you say "Were attached to the bug" What does that mean? lol
Is this a younger generation thing? I went ahead and deleted the "ands". Let me know about the bug thing. We didn't catch the bug from the gal in the first verse did we:)


talkin bout the love bug, being in love
as George Strait's "Love Bug" and Alan Jackson's
"Love's got a hold on you" are two that come to
mind. Alan don't use the "bug" word but he does
talk about going to the doctor to treat love
as if it were a sickness or a "bug". I was
implying now that she was putting a price tag
on love or the "bug".

But to be honest I like your new version
of the last 4 lines better than mine. But
I would take out some I's in there to:

"didn't see the dollar signs
That's not what I was thinking of
ain't in it for the money, honey
I'm in it for the love.
"


One more thing I think needs addressing is
in the second verse where he says that she is
running round all over town. He casually
and non-chalantley talks about it as if he
doesn't care. Most people in a marriage would
not be so understanding about the cheating part
and doing nothing about it. He knows about it
the way the song reads, you may want to have
him take some action on this like maybe a 3rd
verse talkin bout the divorce and she's asking
for a settlement from the court and he tells
her from the stand that he wasn't in the
marriage for money and she ain't getting sh|t
out of him because she was the one who cheated.
I think you see where I'm going with this idea.
:)

Or you could just change the line:

"While I was out working to make ends meet
She was running all over town"

to

"While I was out working to make ends meet
She may have been running all over town"

"may have been" leaves doubt which nothing
can be proved, which there would be no need
for the third verse unless he intends to
investigate his suspicions???


As always just my opinion, keep or sweep ;)

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I had forgot about the love bug, now I see what you were talking about. But since you said liked the other version better, went ahead and put it in there.  See what you mean about the cheating part also, but I didn't mean she was cheating, she was just out spending money faster than he could make it.  In other words, money was what she was after amd didn't care anything about the love part.  I changef the line from running to spending but after looking at it am not sure if it flows with the third line.  The third line now may need to be revisited.    



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 Posted: Wed Mar 29th, 2006 10:35 am
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Roy, LOL

Just my suggestion:

"I met up with my real true love
Got married and settled down
I was making a little money that
She was spending all over town
Then one day when I came home
She met me at the door
Said I needed another part-time job
So she could spend a lil more
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 Posted: Wed Mar 29th, 2006 11:39 am
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Another good one Roy. You keep putting them out. Great job as usual. I am not much into critiquing


 

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 Posted: Wed Mar 29th, 2006 11:59 am
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Great idea Jeff, I love your last verse so am putting it on there.  Hope this does it for you, as it looks good to me. 



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 Posted: Wed Mar 29th, 2006 12:08 pm
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lol I like it ,  another good one here, Jeff does have some good ideals on it too

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Roy Harris wrote:
Great idea Jeff, I love your last verse so am putting it on there. Hope this does it for you, as it looks good to me.

Roy, the bridge might need a tweak since
it may seem a lil cliche. how bout:


Bridge:
"I'm not a banker, if money is your game
you can head on out the door
if you need a prescription for real love
I'm just what the doctor ordered
"

I figured since you were talkin bout a banker,
why not throw in the doctor too, LOL !!!

I think that would just about do it for me.

I like it !! But that's just my opinion :)

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Hi, Jeff.  :)  You're not out trolling for demo customers, are you?  LOL  :D  Just kidding, everyone.  I know Jeff from another site or two.  Good to see you here, ol' buddy.  Why didn't you tell me about this place before?  Keeping it all to yourself, eh?  ;)  :) 

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Hi Roy,

I like your hook.....I can hear that on country radio or even pop for that matter.

Kathy

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BobbyJoe wrote:
Hi, Jeff. :) You're not out trolling for demo customers, are you? LOL :D Just kidding, everyone. I know Jeff from another site or two. Good to see you here, ol' buddy. Why didn't you tell me about this place before? Keeping it all to yourself, eh? ;) :)

Hey Bobby Joe, good to see ya buddy. :)
No, I've already done a demo for Roy
on a project that we collaborated on.
As far as tellin ya about this place,
I didn't know you were lookin for an
alternative sight .... sorry or I would
have said something before. Plus you
didn't ask about the places I frequent. LOL
Welcome to SWF !!! And I can see you've
already shown everybody you have talent
with your songs posted. Good job !!!
Should I tell everyone you use to be
a staff writer or should I keep that
info to myself .... Oops, I let the cat
out of the bag. It just shows how talented
you are dude. Keep writing !!!

By the way, Bobby and I wrote a song together
about a month ago called "The Finger" which
I have yet to get demo'd. Sorry Bobby, I've
been busy with baseball season and such. :(

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Thanks Kathy.  Welcome to the site by the way.  Make yourself at home, we're just like family, sometimes maybe a pat on the back, sometimes maybe a jibe or two.  All in fun though.



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Jeff, quit spreading rumors.  I was a half-ass writer, not a staff writer.

Acutally, I had a first rights refusal deal, which is kinda like being a junior staff writer.  No weekly draw, but my demos were paid for and I received a small advance on each one.  Whoop - de - do!!!  :D  LOL

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Roy, it was missing an ending, tried to fix it.
keep or sweep, or add, edit or delete what
you wish. rough draft only !!!!

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Title: For the money
lyrics by: Roy Harris, Jeff Knight
c2006

1st ver:
I made my Friday night rounds at the places I usually go
Been working hard all week long, had some wild oats to sow
I met up with a sweet young thing, asked her to let's have some fun
She winked and said slip me fifty, I'll show you how it's done.
(I said)

(Chorus)
Ain't in it for the money honey, got bills that's way overdue
My old truck needs new tires, the bank loan didn't come through
I see you're thinkin dollar signs, that's not what I was thinking of
Ain't in it for the money honey, I'm only in it for the love

2nd ver:
I found a soul-mate online, got married and settled down
I was making a little money that she was spending all over town
Then one day when I came home she met me at the door
Said I needed another part-time job so she could spend a little more.
(I told her)

(Bridge)
I'm not a banker or a broker
leaves are the only thing green that grows on trees
Since you really like to spend so much
try earning some 'stead of giving me the 3rd degree

[Spoken] or am I speaking Chinese ?? I can see ..

2nd Chorus:
You're only in it for the money honey, my credit card's maxed and
overdue
I just wanna pay the bills, not buy some fashion high-heel shoes
I still see you're thinkin dollar signs and baby that's just not right
You're only in it for the money honey, so I'm outta here tonight

repeat 2nd chorus (time permits)

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You're only in it for the money honey, so I'm outta here .... tonight
Yea, I'm outta here ..... tonight!!



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