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 Posted: Mon Nov 30th, 2009 03:59 pm
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Tom W
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This is a new Collaboration with Owen Hovenden who wrote some very cool lyrics. Still a work in progress. Trying to complete the bridge portion.

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Redemption Road

Lyrics by Owen Hovenden
Music by Tom Wilson


Its a long and foolish road, this path I’ve laid

The sins of my past have taken there toll

As I turn around retracing those mistakes I’ve made

The judge may find me wanting in the weighing of my soul


Though my time may be up before I get home

I’ll take this path as far as it goes

One foot front the other down redemption road



Night closes in, and a cold wind is blowing

Now I’ve left behind the whisky and the fire that it brings

Salvation’s a joke, regret is but a token

Apologies unspoken won’t change a god damn thing


Though my time may be gone before I get home

I’ll take this path as far as It goes

One foot front the other down redemption road



I’m too old to be a sinner, too guilty to be free

May the grace of forgiveness be granted to me



Regrets don’t change life, but they give a man direction

With the time that’s been given, I’ll undo what can be done

May the good lord give strength, and bring me to my senses

To face my consequences before my race is run


Though my time may be gone before I get home

I’ll take this path as far as it goes

One foot front the other down redemption road

One foot front the other down redemption road


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 Posted: Mon Nov 30th, 2009 08:31 pm
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Wow...guys this is great!  It almost has an early Genesis vibe with the melody changes.  I don't know, that's just what came to mind for me.  No nits here as far as the lyrics or music.  I guess recording wise, I'd dig a more spacey type solo in there, maybe some phaser effect.  You mentioned you're working on the bridge portion.  I don't think I heard a bridge in there.  If there is one, I think maybe changing up the chords a bit more would help it stand out.

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 Posted: Mon Nov 30th, 2009 10:20 pm
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Jason

Again, thanks for your comments. Actually, the bridge is not in there as yet. I've kicked around a few ideas but we have not found the right fit. When it comes around we will post the changes. Thanks again. We appreciate the kind words of encouragement.

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 Posted: Mon Nov 30th, 2009 10:49 pm
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Great work so far on this Tom. I see it's only 2 1/2 minutes so you've definately got some time to fill.

My only thought here is the verse is very easy to get a feel for where it's going, but for some reason, even after a couple of listens to the chorus, I still can't get a feel for what it's doing. It may be because there's very little bass in the mix which isn't bringing out what the chord progression is on the chorus...so it kind of gets nebulus. Maybe adding a bit more bass to the mix might make it clear that up.

just one guys impression, but give it some thought.

Great job on both lyrics and music.

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Great song guys!! I *really* love the lyrics... and the music/melody fits very well. I have no suggestions, it's a very strong song as is.



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 Posted: Wed Dec 9th, 2009 08:38 am
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Well I'd buy it, even as it is. Great work guys. Reminds me of Roy Harper.



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 Posted: Wed Dec 9th, 2009 02:27 pm
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DD,

Thanks for listening. I'll take a listen to the bass and see if there are any adjustments that can be made. Appreciate the suggestion!

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 Posted: Wed Dec 9th, 2009 02:28 pm
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Sinlk & MG,

Thanks for taking time to listen. Your comments are appreciated!

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 Posted: Wed Dec 9th, 2009 02:50 pm
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This is sooo cool!!  Haunting lyric, melody, and catchy tune.  Beautiful performance, too.



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 Posted: Wed Dec 9th, 2009 06:29 pm
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 Man! You guys have this sounding great... to me it has a strong Seals and Crofts flavor to it.  Outstanding work on it!



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 Posted: Sun Dec 13th, 2009 06:01 pm
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This is sounding good, you two. :) 
DD's suggestion re bass in the mix is worth considering as well.

Nice work. ;)

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