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 Posted: Sun Nov 29th, 2009 02:28 am
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Hi - long time no see...been busy with work as usual.

Hope this one rocks your Thanksgiving weekend a little.... :D

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 Posted: Sun Nov 29th, 2009 07:43 pm
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I wish there had been lyrics posted



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 Posted: Sun Nov 29th, 2009 10:54 pm
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Make My Dreams Come True G. Steele

Verse 1
You know you’re making me high
Don’t want to ever come down
And when I’m watching you move
It’s got me spinning around
Got to hold on tight to anything I can find
And though I try, can’t get you out of my mind

Chorus
Always dreaming about you, won’t you make my dreams come true

Verse 2
You’ve put your spell on me
And now I’m all about you
Want every step I take
To get me closer to you
Been looking for this baby all of my life
You got what I want and you make it all right

Chorus

Verse 3
And girl I start to shake
You make me lose control
It’s like a small earthquake
Feel it down in my soul
Tried to play it cool but you make it so hard
You got a hold on me baby right from the start

Chorus/ Intro/Break (same as verse)/Intro

Verse 4
You got a hold of my heart
In the palm of your hand
I’m wrapped around your finger
I want to be your man
No doubt in my mind you’re the one for me
My desire for you just won’t let me be
Always dreaming about you, won’t you make my dreams come true
Always dreaming about you, won’t you make my dreams come true

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 Posted: Sun Nov 29th, 2009 11:54 pm
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Hi Gerald, long time no see, welcome back!!! :) This is really good, I like it very much!! Nice easy listening, a wonderful set of lyrics and great production all rolled into one!!! Dandy hook too!!! :D I've always been partial to songs that have the words 'dream' or 'angel' in them, so I'd have to say this appealed to me on many levels! Nice job and nicely done as well!  :cool: 

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 Posted: Mon Nov 30th, 2009 12:03 am
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Gerald I really enjoyed this song. It had a very cool retro feel to it. Nicely done.



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 Posted: Mon Nov 30th, 2009 02:11 am
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Hi Gerald,

Nice job on this. It has a great groove to it and a killer guitar solo!

By the way, if I may add.... I see this lyric structure as an AAA-B-A with title line positioned in the last line of each "A" section, and the "B" section is the instrumental break...... rather than a Verse/Chorus type as you indicated with your lyrics. Since your title line "Make my Dreams Come True" is sung much like the other verse lines, it does not have its own musical identity in contrast with the lines it follows. I love to see different structures explored like this, instead of the standard Verse/Chorus structure we all tend to use to often. Nice!

So I would suggest writing it out the following way for this song:

Make My Dreams Come True
G. Steele

You know you’re making me high
Don’t want to ever come down
And when I’m watching you move
It’s got me spinning around
Got to hold on tight to anything I can find
And though I try, can’t get you out of my mind
Always dreaming about you, won’t you make my dreams come true

You’ve put your spell on me
And now I’m all about you
Want every step I take
To get me closer to you
Been looking for this baby all of my life
You got what I want and you make it all right
Always dreaming about you, won’t you make my dreams come true

And girl I start to shake
You make me lose control
It’s like a small earthquake
Feel it down in my soul
Tried to play it cool but you make it so hard
You got a hold on me baby right from the start
Always dreaming about you, won’t you make my dreams come true

Intro/Break (same as verse)/Intro

You got a hold of my heart
In the palm of your hand
I’m wrapped around your finger
I want to be your man
No doubt in my mind you’re the one for me
My desire for you just won’t let me be
Always dreaming about you, won’t you make my dreams come true
Always dreaming about you, won’t you make my dreams come true



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