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 Posted: Mon Nov 23rd, 2009 04:14 pm
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This is the first song I tried to do a recording of after realizing I could do so on my computer. I also didn't use a metronome so the timing is a little funky. I had a lot of fun experimenting with different instruments. I was also excited to find out I could use my acoustic guitar for the electric guitar parts. Hope you enjoy.


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Look at those shoes lying on the floor.
One's on the other and the other's on the floor.

One plants in the sun one plants in the shade.
One's growing strong and the others almost dead.

CD's strung out all about the ground.
Some get played and the others don't make a sound.

Look at those hats in their favorite spot.
Old ones on the bottom and the new ones are at the top.

We've all been there.
The best one day but not the next.
It's such a shame man.
Life's ups and downs are so complex.

Look at that house it's bigger than mine.
The trees are bigger still so should I start to climb.

Live life to the fullest that's a motto of ours.
Bigger than the trees and it's bigger than the stars.

I'm not looking for my 15 minutes of fame.
The 16th minute must suck, is Andy the one to blame.

We've all been there.
The best one day but not the next.
It's such a shame man.
Life's ups and downs are so complex.



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 Posted: Tue Nov 24th, 2009 01:14 am
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Hey Randy,

Cool tune! Sounds pretty good and you say this was the very first song you tried recording on your computer! And........are you saying that the lead guitar was done using your acoustic on this?

By the way, I think you need to let that voice of yours come through the mix. You have very good pitch and shouldn't hide it so much. Let it come to the front! Often, people are  more critical of the sound of their own voice than of others.

If I may make a suggestion on this song (in case you plan on recording it again some time)..... The strumming of the acoustic/rhythm guitar work sounds perfect for the song, but I think you should consider picking some choice places to pull it back away from us. Make us want it back and then......... "ahhhhhh good ... there it is.... he's BACK". My first thought is to target the chorus in order to give it the contrast that a chorus needs. How about just switch to strumming 1/8 notes or 1/4 notes through the chorus until you sing "complex" ..............and then go right back to the original 1/16 rhythm, leading in to the next verse.

Just my thoughts. Keep or sweep!

I enjoyed it, Randy!

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 Posted: Tue Nov 24th, 2009 01:21 am
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Randy man sounds good! Has a groove to it bro' . I agree with Troy on bringing the vocals out to the forefront a little.



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Man am I glad you joined us here. I have really liked everything you've posted up here. I am just now at 50 trying to teach myself guitar, so I'm paying particular attention to strumming patterns and such. I like what your doing man.



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 Posted: Tue Nov 24th, 2009 12:58 pm
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That was good, I really enjoyed the feel to that.  I'm with the others, bring the vocals up a tad.  It is fun doing home recording and you'll spend a lot of time hooked on it as you learn more about it.  But that is okay!

James.

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Thanks a lot for the input guys. It's true Troy, I can't stand the vocals. Everytime my voice starts all I hear is the male version of "the nanny" grating away. I'm always trying to find ways to bury the vocals so I can enjoy the rest of the song. Definitely something I'm working on. I'm also hoping that since I don't have a mic and it's just the mic on the computer that with better equipment they might sound a little better.

I am interested in your idea of switching the notes/rhythm but unfortunately I have no idea about anything you're saying. I'm music illiterate!! I am planning on re-recording this some day when I get 12 songs finished and I'll definitely play around with your idea (at least what I think you mean). I may post something to you just to see if it is what you were talking about.

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Nice upbeat song.  Enjoyed the listen. 



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Your right about that James. I am hooked. I get frustrated at work knowing I could be at home writing a song!!!



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just1L wrote: Your right about that James. I am hooked. I get frustrated at work knowing I could be at home writing a song!!!
LOL, oh welcome to my world!!!!!!!!!!!!!  You got it bad.  I miss so much sleep just trying to get that last little part in before calling it a night and then I notice how late it is.  I do most of my recording between 10:00 and 12:00 at night when the family has gone off to bed.

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just1L wrote: Your right about that James. I am hooked. I get frustrated at work knowing I could be at home writing a song!!!

Me too Randy! LOL 

I love your song, the lyrics are way cool! :cool: I think your vocals sound very good!!! And just for the record... we've brought 'many' out that particular vocal-closet around here, so you may as well give it up and bring those vocals on up 'cause I'm afraid you're outnumbered here! LOL Very nice.. and rocking good... tune Randy and I'm really happpy to see you getting in on our open mic!   

 

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I really dug this Randy. It shows how music is just a good thing. I think you have some good suggestions here too. I believe what Troy is saying is to fall out of the groove sort of like you did at the end, and then bring it back in. It takes the listener with you on that ride, and that is usually a good thing.:D

Good job Randy!



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just1L wrote: I am interested in your idea of switching the notes/rhythm but unfortunately I have no idea about anything you're saying. I'm music illiterate!! I am planning on re-recording this some day when I get 12 songs finished and I'll definitely play around with your idea (at least what I think you mean). I may post something to you just to see if it is what you were talking about.

Thanks again all.

What I meant to say with my suggestion about the strumming was to cut the number of strokes in half or so at key points in the song.

1234/1234/1234/1234 (every number in this one represents a strummed chord, as I hear you playing it)

1234/1234/1234/1234 (In this, black numbers are the only ones strummed. there are half as many.)

I hope this may make it more clear.

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I think that you're hooked is the great thing! You've done some amazing things with limited equipment. I like the upbeat.

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Troy33 wrote:
just1L wrote: I am interested in your idea of switching the notes/rhythm but unfortunately I have no idea about anything you're saying. I'm music illiterate!! I am planning on re-recording this some day when I get 12 songs finished and I'll definitely play around with your idea (at least what I think you mean). I may post something to you just to see if it is what you were talking about.

Thanks again all.

What I meant to say with my suggestion about the strumming was to cut the number of strokes in half or so at key points in the song.

1234/1234/1234/1234 (every number in this one represents a strummed chord, as I hear you playing it)

1234/1234/1234/1234 (In this, black numbers are the only ones strummed. there are half as many.)

I hope this may make it more clear.

-Troy

I think I do get it. You'll know the next time you hear that song. And to an earlier comment you made... Yes I played the acoustic and then went in and added distortion, reverb and echo to it. I have to say it was one of the highlights of returning to guitar to find out all the crazy possibilities there are to record music. I remember back in the day I'd use a tape recorder to play a part. Then play that loudly on the stereo while playing the drums and record that and so on and so forth... man, those tapes sounded just awful!!!

Thanks again for the tip.



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For a first recording thats pretty good! You seem like the kinda guy who's going to experiment so I can only imagine you'll keep getting better.

To me the strongest part of your song was the groove. Really got me into it. Try out any and all kinds of instruments you can, but dont be afraid to pare back either to let the strongest parts shine through.

Great job! Glad you posted this one. :)  



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Your songs have a really interesting aesthetic.  You have an interesting feel for sound layering.  Your lyrics are also very intriguing.

I do agree that you need to bring your voice out to the front.  You layed the vox fx on way too heavy.  Let it run free man! 

The ending is bizarre yet appropriate.  I liked it.



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Hi Randy,
 there's nothing wrong with this  first time recording, now that you are hooked , you can start banging your head , or have brain swelling like the rest of us trying to understanding all there is to know about recording, enjoy the process.

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Lots of interesting stuff in this song. Maybe enough to make two different songs out of it!
I enjoyed it all, however, I agree with some of the other posts about the rhythm. It is quite frenetic. My two bucks worth is that the verses could be quite conversational and then let rip in the chorus to provide some build-up and release.

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Thanks Keith. Thanks for you input. Hopefully I will get to re-record this one and apply all the great suggestions.



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What I really like about this number is its simplicity.
It is easy to remember and it is original. What more could
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