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 Posted: Mon Mar 13th, 2006 10:07 pm
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:Angel:Revised,New title

 Lift Her Up

W. W .J .D ?

Well she's strugglin'
just to get through the season
peelin' all those years
of doubt and pain away
'cause it's not easy,
stayin' away from what is pleasin'
she's working hard
 so she can live a better way.

(pre- chorus)
She's a butterfly emerging from it's prison,
with serenity and prayer in her new vision,
she shares her heart with anyone who cares to see
of what life , for her, is really meant to be.
chorus:
Won't you lift her up,
and help her on her way,
there's so much lovin' hope
 you could give today
In just a kind word
or a smile from you,
you could answer
What Would JESUS Do?
V2
Her eyes are open,
to see GOD'S love
and all His blessings,
Her heart is willing now,
to let GOD have His way.
Her wings are ready
to fly away from second guessing.
She knows GOD'S plan
will usher in, a better day.

PreChorus:
Chorus:



 


(c) 2006 Debbie Dant
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Last edited on Sat Aug 25th, 2007 06:40 pm by miraclebaby



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 Posted: Tue Mar 14th, 2006 01:11 am
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Good idea but to me a little soft as the last line is the only thing connecting the title to the story but effective but perhaps more for a poem,just my mind cranking out criticism,Yours johnny

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 Posted: Thu Mar 16th, 2006 10:34 pm
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I agreed.So I edited it.

Trouble is, your post might not still apply to the newest version,yet appears directly below  the song as shown (above this post).

How do you like it now?



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 Posted: Thu Mar 16th, 2006 10:45 pm
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I like it better,lift her up is what we should do,in prayer new christians can really get whacked by this worlds ignorance at first and they need all the help they can get,[what did Jesus do?]He lifted her up, good job Johnny,

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 Posted: Thu Mar 16th, 2006 10:51 pm
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Thanks.Johnny. I have the melody.I just need to get it recorded.It sounds better than it reads,at least,to me.



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 Posted: Thu Mar 16th, 2006 11:17 pm
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we can't hit a home run every time but if we don't keep hitting we will never hit one,go for it Johnny!!!!!!!!!!and God Bless ya :Flame This:

Last edited on Thu Mar 16th, 2006 11:18 pm by johnnybgoode

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