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 Posted: Wed Feb 15th, 2006 03:09 pm
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Posted by TSF-Mike

Breath of Air
Copyright 2004 Debbie Dant


BREATH OF AIR

I never had to look too far for challenges,
they always seemed to come smack-dab at me.
And even though I wondered
how much I could stand,
the answer could be found on bended knee.

HE’S THE BREATH OF AIR
THAT I’M BREATHING
HE’S THE REASON I’M ALIVE
WITHOUT HIS (Breath Of Air)THAT  I’M NEEDING
THERE’S NO WAY I COULD SURVIVE.

Sometimes  I’d try to forge ahead,
and do it my own way,
but for my stubborn waste of time
I’d always have to pay.
For if I had been listening,
I’d known just what to do,
to have that peace inside my heart
that only GOD gives you.

HE’S THE BREATH OF AIR THAT I’M BREATHING
HE’S THE REASON I’M ALIVE
WITHOUT HIS (Breath Of Air) THAT  I’M NEEDING
THERE’S NO WAY I COULD SURVIVE.

This world is full of choices
that each one of us must make,
without the proper frame of mind,
sometimes we make mistakes.
The trappings of this world,
are all around should we partake,
but when we free our souls from it,
our spirits will not ache.

HE’S THE BREATH OF AIR
THAT I’M BREATHING
HE’S THE REASON I’M ALIVE
WITHOUT HIS (Breath Of Air)THAT  I’M NEEDING
THERE’S NO WAY I COULD SURVIVE.

(c)2004 by Debbie Dant



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 Posted: Wed Feb 15th, 2006 03:46 pm
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Debbie,

Great song. Your vocal is very good. It will sound so good with music. Talk to Jeff and see if he can help you with the music.

DON



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 Posted: Wed Feb 15th, 2006 08:31 pm
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Don, Thank-You ever so much for taking time to listen. Your compliment is appreciated as I am a fan of yours and enjoy all your songs.(And that is not just to butter you up...you already heard my song.) Congrats on being the Featured Songwriter. I like the featured song too.

 I have been following the posts and have you in my prayers as well. There is a reason for the name miraclebaby..Great things Do happen, and I will continue to keep you in my prayers.



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 Posted: Thu Feb 16th, 2006 03:05 am
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Hey Debbie,

I think you've really got something here....and I agree with Don, nice job on the vocal, even without music....however..I did notice that your 1st verse doesn't follow suit lyrically or melody wise as you last 2 verses.  And I noticed you took out "Breath of Air" in the 4th line of your chorus and replaced it with love, which IMO it kinda weakened your hook.  But I enjoyed it...good job Deb :) 



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 Posted: Thu Feb 16th, 2006 04:49 pm
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:D:D:D:Dthe song is a breath of fresh air,I know how hard it is to write good gospel,I enjoyed it and I really like the chorus even with love inserted,keep up the good work Johnny

Last edited on Thu Feb 16th, 2006 04:50 pm by johnnybgoode

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good job Debbie lovely voice, sure would like to hear music with it, I noticed you changed a few words but they work out fine :)

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 Posted: Wed Apr 5th, 2006 04:43 pm
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Thanks Gene, The lyric change shown here were made after some reviews. I do need to get some music,I am still trying to figure that one out since I do not play any instruments(or read music),



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Thanks Crystal and Johnny. I have a final revision and demo  to complete.

I prefer to see 6 subjects/67:Angel: views on the front page than 6/66.:shock:

Thanks for listening.



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Hi you have a real clear nice voice.. Good lyrics.. look forward to more

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 Posted: Sun Apr 23rd, 2006 07:21 pm
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Thanks TOm, I just shared this one (by popular request) again at the bi-annual Adult Cancer Camp I attend. The week-end was great and the song seems to be growing on them  ;).:Angel:



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I believe this song needs a little help can I offer any suggestions? First one question? Why did you mess with the chorus? Lol. Sis it was fine exactly how it was written all you needed to do was revisit your song.

He's the air that I breathe

The reason I'm alive

Without his love and mercy

There's no way I could survive

When I've just about lost my breath

from life anxieties

He's my life support

The air that I breathe

You don't have to take my suggestion I just think some kicks here or there are missing.  For instance I would find it rather difficult to sing trappings.

You have such a lovely voice you sounded nervous though sing with ambition especially without music.  I loved the way you constructed the song though. Also far for is a no if someone else will sing it because it is almost the same. Find a different introduction to the song because if you are going to pitch this song to any publisher this is where you need to be your strongest. Life is a challenge we must simply live. We all look for challenges that seems to smack us in the face. What challenges seems to be a snare or stepping stone to you? Then tell your audience. For example you try to steal "forge ahead" perfect language.

I hope I haven't dishearten you in any way.

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 Posted: Mon May 29th, 2006 11:54 pm
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Thanks Darappsongstress, for the thoughtful review. I am in the process of addressing some of your points.... I have seen this song change so much, and know threre are many things which could make it better. Keep an eye out for a new version....Thanks for your time and comments

 



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 Posted: Thu Jun 1st, 2006 02:08 pm
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Debbie,

I like the song! Good vocal. Can't wait to hear this when it's finished!!:D

Susan

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