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 Posted: Tue Feb 7th, 2006 02:42 pm
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The Sweeter Tears.

                   Verse 1   
Now there’s a purpose to this game of life,
A lesson somewhere to be found.
Amidst the tears and pain, for all that’s lost there’s something gained.
A longing to be homeward bound.
A longing to be once more homeward bound.

                    Chorus:
You’ve got to cry for laughing and trust it all works out.
Cos bitter tears don’t end those years of uncertain doubt.
You’ve got to cry for laughing and wash away those fears,
Cos crying in the name of love are by far the sweeter tears,
Cos crying in the name of love are by far the sweeter tears.

                    Mid 8:
Tonight is all I’ve got to spend with you,
Take my hand and see me through.

                   Verse 2
Now when you look into those eyes of love,
You find the strength to get back home.
And in those eyes of love you find that there’s more than enough,
The grace that now you’ll never be alone,
At last this grace has come to take you home.

                    Chorus:
You’ve got to cry for laughing and trust it all works out.
Cos bitter tears don’t end those years of uncertain doubt.
You’ve got to cry for laughing and wash away those fears,
Cos crying in the name of love are by far the sweeter tears,
Cos crying in the name of love are by far the sweeter tears.
Cos crying in the name of love are by far the sweeter tears.

© Paul William Mattock

To hear a rough demo http://www.soundclick.com/paulwilliammattock/

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 Posted: Tue Feb 7th, 2006 03:06 pm
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Paul, I listened to it again with the lyrics. This is a beautiful song! Didn't catch it with just the vocal, might be the language barrier, LOL!



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 Posted: Tue Feb 7th, 2006 04:24 pm
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Oh I see! you say tomato and I say tomahto...
I think it's a little simpler than that, I'm just not that good a singer, but waiting on the favours of friends to help out can just drag on. So, if needs must...
Glad you like the song.
I personally would like to hear a female voice on it. I sing it like Im wrestling a bear.
Just to put the cat in among the pigeons, What would you say defines 'Country' ? Now, I'm not looking to start a fight so lets keep it clean, but its been said that a white man can't play the blues, but at what point does he/she brings something of themselves to the music that gives it value and worth?
I'm interested in how people see themselves depicted by their craft.
By the way, this is a free for all, so everyone can just jump right in.
I'll just slip out the back door....

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 Posted: Tue Feb 7th, 2006 04:49 pm
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Define Country..... That is a great question. I hope some others chime in here. Lately, I think it encompasses traditional country music, southern rock, blues, a lot of pop, and with the music maffia, a little rap.

Country to me is story songs that you can actually hear the words of the story.

Of course you could go by the Alabama song, "If ya wanna play in Texas, ya gotta have a fiddle in the band" At least a dobro, steel guitar, mandolin, or something!



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 Posted: Tue Feb 7th, 2006 05:30 pm
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:D:P:(:):X:shock::dude::dude:To me the genre country is self explanatory: If it's country it has to have a little country in it,the first real country spoke of the country, the lakes and rivers forests skies flowers grass you name it,then country included the activities of the people who lived in the countryside,cowboys and girls and Indians and horses and cattle and gamblers and rustlers and robbers and outlaws.Of course country includes all of the things like romance and breaking up and getting drunk etc that country people everywhere do ,that's as far as I go some go all the way to the big city it's all in how far you believe the country goes Johnny

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 Posted: Tue Feb 7th, 2006 07:01 pm
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Hi Johnny,I like the way you talk about 'country' as being first and foremost a place. I've always got caught up in thinking its all about the music, but actually country music IS all about the place, and what goes on in that place. I like the sound of that...

keep the dream alive,

Paul

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 Posted: Tue Feb 7th, 2006 09:16 pm
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The true test of a country song is:

Put it on the turntable and play it
backwards .....
If you get your woman back, pick-up truck back
your dog back, and best of all you get
to play your guitar in your underwear
on the front porch w/o getting arrested!

If that happens .... it's a country song !!!



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 Posted: Wed Feb 8th, 2006 03:26 am
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You've hit the nail right on the head Jeff. The most important item for anyone involved in 'country', and that's a porch.
First thing tomorrow I'm going to order me some timber and build one. Then I'm going to write a song about it...in my underwear!

Paul

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 Posted: Tue Mar 28th, 2006 12:49 pm
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Hey Paul,

Nice new demos you have there on your soundclick ;)

I seem to recognize those voices, LOL!



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It's amazing what you can do with some old tin cans, a washboard and some lengths of rubber hose...it's all in the mix you know!

many thanks for your hard work.

Will attempt to put them up on the site later today.
( Now where's that manual )

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 Posted: Tue Mar 28th, 2006 01:11 pm
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Unfortunately you can't link the media player here to soundclick. Sounclick is not compatable. If you have another site that you can upload to, you can have the player in this forum linked to your MP3.  just type the full URL to the mp3 in the media player.

That post should go into the Country Music database. I would load them on my site for you, but I'm still not finished packing for Nashville and I wanted to hit the road soon!

Maybe TSF-Mike can help you post them?



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 Posted: Tue Mar 28th, 2006 01:21 pm
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Thanks for the info Mike. I have a couple of business websites which I run and could upload the songs to one of these, and then link.
Will give it a try later.

Have a good trip.

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 Posted: Tue Mar 28th, 2006 04:14 pm
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I'd like to listen later when I get home from work.  If I'm being keylogged, I'm dead meat.  LOL  :D

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Very nice country sounding demo.  :)  The intro reminds me of Garth's "The Beaches of Cheyenne," but that's not a bad thing.  Great production and super vocals with lots of well applied/controlled emotion.  You could proudly play this for anyone, from a publisher to an artist himself/herself.

The lyric, IMO, is well written and beautiful, but not extremely commercial.  Along with the well-fitting melody, it makes a very nice song.  But commercially, one would have to ask, what is it about?  It's not readily apparent to the listener, IMO.  As a listener, I don't quite get it lyrically.  It doesn't reach out and grab me.

Please remember, this is just my honest opinion.  Everyone else may "get it," leaving me out in the cold.  The best thing to do is pitch it and get other opinions.  I would be happy to be found out wrong.

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Well I made it into Tennessee, I'm down for the night and only a few more hours on the road to Nashville. Catch ya on the flip side.

I just had to log on and see the what everyone thought of the demos. There's more where that came from!

I happen to like sweeter tears, but then I'm more of a melody kind of guy!

Now, Brand New Day is very understandable, and also has a great melody!



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I agree with you BobbyJoe, the lyrics are rather obscure,( Although it all makes sense in my head ). I write for myself first and foremost and if others can enjoy what I do then thats a bonus. I tend to to use words and phrases as much for their melody and sound as I do their literal meaning, and I guess that doesn't help if your story telling, which country music is all about. So I would have to agree with you and say that I've probably missed the mark. But these songs have been around for quite a few years now and I'd been promising myself to get them recorded and I'm pleased with the results. If I was in it for the money I'd have given up long ago.
I appreciate your feed back and honesty and will take on board all that you've said. The great thing about songwriting, there's always another one just waiting to be written.

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 Posted: Wed Mar 29th, 2006 08:12 am
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Hi, Paul.  :)  The real bottom line is if you like it.  If you do, great.  The heck with commerciality.

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