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| Posted: Fri Feb 3rd, 2006 11:24 pm |
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Crystal Lynn
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Just wanted some feedback...I am planning on re-doing this vocal myself...
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I BELIEVE
I BELIEVE
Key of D KAPO 1ST FRET
TEMPO = ADAGIO
Intro: D…G…D………..G….D
D G
I'm standing in the rain
A D
Looking towards the sky
D
It seems to hide
G A
The tears from my eyes
D G
The dark clouds above
A D
Offer no relief
G
As I close my eyes
A D
I.... say…..Lord I believe
G A D
I believe.......The blue sky is there
G A D
I believe your gentle hands do care
G A Bm/E
And then I look up and I begin to stare
Bm/E Bm/A G.....A
As the apple blossoms gently fill the air
Bm/E
I wish with all my heart
Bm/A G
That this rainy day will bring a brand new start
G A Bm/E ....Bm/A.....G....A
As I feel your warmth from the depths of my heart......
D
I believe
Intro: D…G…D………..G….D
D G
I'm standing in the rain
A D
Letting it wash away
D
All of my sins
G A
And all of my pain
D G
The dark clouds above
A D
Are starting to lift
G
As I wipe my eyes
A D
He..... knows…..I believe
G A D
I believe.......The blue sky is there
G A D
I believe your gentle hands do care
G A Bm/E
And then I look up and I begin to stare
Bm/E Bm/A G....A
As the apple blossoms gently fill the air
Bm/E
I wish with all my heart
Bm/A G
That this rainy day will bring a brand new start
G A Bm/E....Bm/A.....G....A
As I feel your warmth from the depths of my heart......
D
I believe
G A D
I believe.......The blue sky is there
G A D
I believe your gentle hands do care
Bm/E Bm/A G........A
I believe there's a reason you chose me from the start
Bm/E Bm/A G A D ……..G…..D
I believe...... I believe.......thank you Lord for believing in me
BAR T Publishing / RETAK Records, Words and Music By Crystal Collins and Teddie Cochran
* All Rights
Reserved By Authors
class=verdanaSmall(©2005 C.Collins/T.Cochran)
Last edited on Sat Feb 4th, 2006 10:49 am by Crystal Lynn
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| Posted: Fri Feb 3rd, 2006 11:57 pm |
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I think it could be a real good song, I'd like to hear you do the vocal
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| Posted: Sat Feb 4th, 2006 12:32 am |
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Crystal Lynn
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thanks Sean.....I'm working on that....
Do you think the "apple blossom's" line is lame? I didn't care for it...but then again....I'm kinda lame....lol
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| Posted: Sat Feb 4th, 2006 01:47 am |
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Ha, you question it, so there must be a reason. I ask myself, have I ever stood in the rain and smelled apple blossoms. Don't think I have. Of course, if you were standing in an apple orchard in the spring, you might smell the apple blossoms, but you would smell that even if it didn't rain. What I have smelled is the smell of the fresh rain itself. Everyone knows that smell. So why not say:
As the smell of the fresh rain fills up the air
Doesn't have to be eactly that, but something similar
In your first verse, you say: Offer no relieve. I think you used that to rhyme with believe, but it is not grammatically correct. That would be: Offer no relief. I think you could say that and still have what that call a slant rhyme or whatever they call it. It would be close enough to sound OK.
Other than that, I am like Sean, would like to hear you sing it, as I think you guys have a good one here.
Last edited on Sat Feb 4th, 2006 01:50 am by Roy Harris
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| Posted: Sat Feb 4th, 2006 11:06 am |
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Crystal Lynn
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Yea.....My sentiments exactly.....I'd like to re-do some things with it...
I just thought I'd put it on here.....I'm trying to concentrate my efforts on my new stuff....just having a time getting the ball rolling...if you know what I mean....
OH...lol that was a typo...."relieve" was supposed to "relief" thanks for keeping an open eye..... ....lol
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| Posted: Sat Feb 4th, 2006 11:42 am |
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I think you're in good shape with a song like this. You'll do it sweetie
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| Posted: Sat Feb 4th, 2006 12:25 pm |
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Crystal Lynn
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thanks Sean...this was actually an old poem I wrote last year....not typically the kind of stuff I usually do...but it was something different to work on.
And I did edit Roy....tell her to get churnin' up the dirt
Last edited on Sat Feb 4th, 2006 02:27 pm by Crystal Lynn
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| Posted: Sat Feb 4th, 2006 02:07 pm |
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Churning the dirt reminds me of the drunk who was walking thru the cemetary. It was raining and he came up on an open grave that had been dug for somebody the next day. Well, he slipped and fell in and couldn't get out. He started hollering, "please help me I'm cold" over and over. Finally, another drunk comes walking by and upon hearing the hollering goes over to see what is going on. Comes upon the drunk in the bottom of that hole hollering "please help me I'm cold" and he replied, of course, you are cold, you done kicked all your dirt off of you.  Am I bad?
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Mike...thank you...I would like to re-do some things like I said...not sure I can re-fresh it up...for the simple fact..sometimes...you just have creative differences with people....and the track that was sent to me..had some mistakes in the playing..I ask for another...and the 2nd was just as bad...so I am trying to get this band to maybe work up some music for me...so I can re-do it....
Roy ...your awlful!!
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| Posted: Tue Mar 14th, 2006 01:38 am |
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Hi guys!! I love the thread of it. The apple blossoms could better read fragrance of flowers or some such I think.Kinda hard to communicate faith in a solitary situation but not impossible,Voice could do it for this one,good luck Last edited on Tue Mar 14th, 2006 01:39 am by johnnybgoode
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| Posted: Tue Mar 14th, 2006 08:37 am |
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Good work Crystal I really like the lyrics, and yes the apple blossoms are a little out of place, could go along the line of, as his peaceful love, gently fills the air, or something along that line,
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Crystal Lynn
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hey thanks gene!! That could really work nice.....maybe I should get this one finished....though it has been pitched to a few places already. I remember the day I sent them out...Brooks and Dunn song "I Believe" came out......kinda made me feel like mine sucked....lol Oh well you learn...move on...thanks again Gene!!
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