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 Posted: Sat Nov 1st, 2008 10:28 pm
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 'Don't Want to Love You Anymore'



Don't want to spend all my lonely nights
Wonderin' what you're doin' or where you are
Out in some Honky Tonk or good time Bar
I'm sorry that I ever let things go this far..


Cause.. I don't want to love you anymore
We've been down this road once before
So baby, just get out.. go on out the door...
Cause I'm not goin' live like this anymore


There may come a time I will regret this
But I doubt..There ever will be..Cause
To live my life with a low down cheater..
Dead. Yes dead..I would just as soon be...


Baby, I don't want to love you anymore
We've been down this road once before
I'm gettin' out of this cheatin' situation
Goin' Stop lovin' you and that's for sure.


You come home drinkin' and thinkin'
I'm your second next..best thing...
We'll baby look on your side of the bed
You'll find a little note..tied with my ring

 
When you read the note..it will explain 
I'm tired of your cheatin lies..and alibis
I'm not goin' live this way.. thats for sure
No I'm not Going To Love You Anymore....

 
Not Going to Love you Anymore..
I'm Not goin' live this way..thats for sure...

Not Going to Love you anymore
Not Going to Love you anymore

Comments are appreciated,
Fran Williams



 

 

 

 

 

 

 





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Miss Frances, good to see you posting another one!  You were concerned about your song structure a short while back, but I must say, this is looking very good!  I never have gotten those books we talked about, but I do want to get them. Do you feel they have helped you in the way of song structure?  

Just one little thing I'd like to suggest, Miss Frances.  It would be better for the readers if you were to define your verses and choruses.  Like Verse I and Verse II and so forth... and then do the same with the chorus, it makes it a lot easier to read and figure out whats-what when you're reading it.  Just a minor little detail actually, but it does help.  Looking good lady!   



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SundownSam wrote: Miss Frances, good to see you posting another one!  You were concerned about your song structure a short while back, but I must say, this is looking very good!  I never have gotten those books we talked about, but I do want to get them. Do you feel they have helped you in the way of song structure?  

Just one little thing I'd like to suggest, Miss Frances.  It would be better for the readers if you were to define your verses and choruses.  Like Verse I and Verse II and so forth... and then do the same with the chorus, it makes it a lot easier to read and figure out whats-what when you're reading it.  Just a minor little detail actually, but it does help.  Looking good lady!   



:Angel:Hi Sara,

Thank you for the comments. I do appreciate the time you gave to respond.
Yes, I did buy several good books, and I am doing research on some of the
basics, as time permits. The storyline, of beginning, middle,and the end. The
gender, for this song is a female. Her situation gets resolved, by kickin' his
butt out..the slammin' door..lol  I Tried to use my hookline, as many times
as I could...(to drive home the title).. You are right about the suggestion
to label the verses. I didn't do this because, the song was not finished yet.
My thoughts on the song structure, would not be the same as other great
songwriters. I decided to go ahead and post, to protect my Hook/Storyline.
I do share some, but I wanted to take this one off the grazing market..lol

I hoped, that a good songwriter, would consider a 50/50 co-write.

Have a Blessed Day,
Frances


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Thank you for explaining why you didn't label the verses and choruses, it makes perfect sense that since this is a work in progress that you would like to wait until you're a little farther along on it to see where you stand with the verses and choruses.  Miss Frances I see nothing wrong with your song structure.  I'm not an expert on it that's for sure and I'm afraid I actually only know one or two ways to structure the songs I write...hence the reasons for the books! LOL  But, it's looking pretty good to me.  



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SundownSam wrote: Thank you for explaining why you didn't label the verses and choruses, it makes perfect sense that since this is a work in progress that you would like to wait until you're a little farther along on it to see where you stand with the verses and choruses.  Miss Frances I see nothing wrong with your song structure.  I'm not an expert on it that's for sure and I'm afraid I actually only know one or two ways to structure the songs I write...hence the reasons for the books! LOL  But, it's looking pretty good to me.  
:Angel:Hi Sara,

Thank you for responding.  I need to read those darn books, and
not just do a quick study..lol  I believe the basic idea for my song is
orginial. I hope it can be developed into a good song...Your help and
advice are very much appreciated....

Blessings,
Frances

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Maybe a chorus , for my song.


Baby, I'm not goin' live this way anymore
been down this road to many times before
I'm gettin' out of this hurtful situation
never should of fell for the cheatin kind..
There may come a time, when I will reget it
when your memory, hurts me while I sleep
...but I will wake up with you off my mind

Don't want to love you anymore
Don't want to love you anymore
 

 

 

 


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Fran...........I'm lovin' what you're doin' here dear!.............:D

And that chorus rocks!..............I think you have somethin' here..........;)

I do have a suggestion or two.........I don't know if you have a melody in mind............so this may not work if you do............but to me some of the words are crowding the chorus...........:)

Baby, I'm not goin' live this way anymore
been down this road to many times before
I'm gettin' out of this hurtful situation
never should of fell for the cheatin kind..
There may come a time, when I will reget it
when your memory, hurts me while I sleep
...but I will wake up with you off my mind

Don't want to love you anymore
Don't want to love you anymore
 


What about something like this?...........It's simpler..........but the lines seem to flow better for me...........:)

Baby, I'm not gonna live this way anymore
Been down this road too many times
I'm gettin' out of this hurtful situation
Never should of fell for the cheatin kind..
There may be some time that I'll reget
When your memory hurts me to the core
But soon I'll wake up with you off my mind

Don't want to love you anymore
Don't want to love you anymore
 

Keep or sweep dear!............:)  Great job so far dear!



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:Excited:Hi Lissa,

Wow, Wow.!! You have a Fab!! way with words. Wow!
I love the changes you made.. The melody could be a
sad/ tune for the verses...and  a slight up-tempo beat
for the chorus, to give her attitude.. lol

Let's Kick it.....Love it..Thank you so much!!

Your help is appreciated,
Frances

 

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:).........Dear.......you did the hard part...........I jus' added lipstick an' shine............;)


Glad to help ya dear...........I think this song's gonna be great............:)


Lissa  :cool:



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:Violin_Man:Hi Lissa,

I am going to work on the song structure, and I want you

to know, that I really appreciated your help... Thank you!!

Frances

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:Violin_Man:Hi Lissa,

Your lipstick and shine inspired a few lines..
I'm not sure, where they will fit, but they add to
the storyline....

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Nov.01,2008

First time.. in a long-time, I felt like me
Not some play-thing.. you hope I can be
Look in my magic mirror, a young girls smile
A lovers little fool, haven't seen you in awhile

Make-up and slim-down.. new hair style in fashion
hope to get some loving attention with real passion
tired of trying to satisfy a memory of an old use to be
First time-In a long time- I have felt like me..

Don't want to live my life in your yesterday
Tryin' to be a lover you don't have anymore
don't want to live my life this way, cause I'm not her
Don't want to be hurt day after day.. that's for sure

..........Don't want to love you anymore
..........Don't want to love you anymore

These lines are only for consideration, I'm not sure if is another song?

Comments are appreciated,
Frances

 

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Hey Fran..........I'm gonna shoot ya a pm..............;)

Lissa  :cool:



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:Angel:Hi Lissa,

The way you have written the song is perfect!!
I love it...I could never have finished it like you did.
Will you please post it, and put it under a
50/50 co-write for us.  I believe this song is fantastic!!
Thanks to you...  The last few verses might be another
song in the works...  "First Time in A Long Time" 

Thank you so much,
Frances

P.S., Lissa I believe that your suggestion for a Reba McIntire's
style and flavor is excellent..With her sassy attitude in songs.

 

 

 

 












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:?........I'll have to post back in a couple of days Fran.  We got some unfortunate news yesterday evening involving one of Billy's (my 4yo son) classmates.  I've made a post in General with more info.

I promise to be back though......:)



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lissaw70 wrote: :?........I'll have to post back in a couple of days Fran.  We got some unfortunate news yesterday evening involving one of Billy's (my 4yo son) classmates.  I've made a post in General with more info.

I promise to be back though......:)
:Angel:Hi Lissa,

Thank you for letting me know about your son's classmate. I
requested prayers for her in the shout box. My Prayers are
with this, little blessed Girl and her Family.. Please give your
Son Billy, a hug for me..

Blessings,
Frances Williams

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