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 Posted: Wed Jul 30th, 2008 10:20 pm
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:cool:.........This idea's been rattlin' around.........thought I'd post it here .........not sure if it's ever gonna get finished.........but it's been drivin' me nutz........an' keepin' me from writin' anything else..........:madface.....especially since all I hear singin' it is Big & Rich........or Montgomery Gentry..........:rollface


Bonafide Redneck


(v1)
I tell my friends
I've been waiting
I've been holdin' out
For a fairy tale ending
But the men I've met
Have all turned to toads
Life keeps sendin' me
Down the wrong roads


(lift)
But destiny ain't abandoned me cold
There is a man who fits the mold

(c)
He'll ride in on eight huge studs
Headlights blazin' on his Silverado
Radio blarin' with the good ole boys
A modern day desperado
A lazy southern smile on his lips
Thumb hangin' in the pocket on his hip
When he steals that first kiss you can bet
I'll be branded by a bonafide redneck

© Melissa Williamson 2008

Last edited on Thu Jul 31st, 2008 01:41 am by lissaw70



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lol thats good fun Lissa. I think your chorus is particularly strong. The verse is written from a man's POV but it doesnt feel like something a man would say to me. But you've got something good happening here, I like it.



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:) .......That was my thought too........(actually,  I keep havin' flashes of the Marlboro man ..........:rollface) but I had to get 'em on paper before they disappeared into the recesses of my brain to drive me crazy again........:Tunes2:........maybe a change in perspective?..........I'll run edit it...........:cool:



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Definately a good song in the works here, The chorus seems solid. Maybe this could become a duet. Think Gretchen Wilson 1st verse and chorus, and Big or Rich 2nd  verse and chorus, then both on the final chorus maybe.  Just a thought, good luck with it.



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I like it!!!:)



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Definately a good song in the works here, The chorus seems solid. Maybe this could become a duet. Think Gretchen Wilson 1st verse and chorus, and Big or Rich 2nd verse and chorus, then both on the final chorus maybe. Just a thought, good luck with it.







..........You may be on to somethin' there dear............



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Just some thoughts......... as always keep em or sweep em

I tell my friends I've been waiting
and I've been holding out
I want that fairy tale ending
that's what life is all about

The men I've met have turned to toads
I need that Cinderella kiss
I want a man who understands
Lord where is my sweet prince



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Ok...........:cool:.........now I'm hearin' kind of a Gretchen Wilson/Charlie Daniels/Montgomery Gentry/Big & Rich hybrid..........:shock:.........Man.........some o' these people gotta get outta my head.............:madface



Bonafide Redneck

(v1)
I tell my friends I've been waiting
That I've been holding out
I gotta have the fairy tale
That's what life is all about

All my men have turned to toads
But I want that Cinderella story
I need a man who understands
I demand love in all it's glory


(lift)
But destiny ain't abandoned me cold
I know there's a man who fits the mold

(c)
I'll ride in on eight huge studs
Headlights blazin' on my Silverado
Radio blarin' with the good ole boys
A modern day desperado
A bad-boy southern smile on my face
Will leave no doubt what's on my mind
When a bonafide redneck brands your soul
You'll leave your prince behind.




© Melissa Williamson 2008



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Yeah...I can see Wilson doing this! It's cool girl!

I bow to you:worthyface

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..........Thanks John dear!............:D

:? ........Only one problem now.............I think I evicted the friends in my head too soon.............now I got writer's block.............


Might require some serious meditation to finish...........:Tunes2:





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lissaw70 wrote: Ok...........:cool:.........now I'm hearin' kind of a Gretchen Wilson/Charlie Daniels/Montgomery Gentry/Big & Rich hybrid..........:shock:.........Man.........some o' these people gotta get outta my head.............:madface



Bonafide Redneck

(v1)
I tell my friends I've been waiting
That I've been holding out
I gotta have the fairy tale
That's what life is all about

All my men have turned to toads
But I want that Cinderella story
I need a man who understands
I demand love in all it's glory


(lift)
But destiny ain't abandoned me cold
I know there's a man who fits the mold

(c)
I'll ride in on eight huge studs
Headlights blazin' on my Silverado
Radio blarin' with the good ole boys
A modern day desperado
A bad-boy southern smile on my face
Will leave no doubt what's on my mind
When a bonafide redneck brands your soul
You'll leave your prince behind.




© Melissa Williamson 2008


There ya go Girl........... Your on to something really good here, I'm sure of it.



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Dunno if this is pushin' it.............:madface.......but here goes..........:bigsmile



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(female vocal )
I tell my friends I've been waiting
That I've been holding out
I gotta have the fairy tale
That's what love is all about

All my men have turned to toads
But I want that Cinderella story
I need a man who understands
I demand love in all it's glory


(lift)
But destiny ain't abandoned me cold
I know there's a man who fits the mold

(male vocal )
I'll ride in on eight huge studs
Headlights blazin' on my Silverado
Radio blarin' with the good ole boys
A modern day desperado
The bad-boy southern smile on my face
Will leave no doubt what's on my mind
When this bonafide redneck brands your soul
You'll leave your prince behind.

(female vocal)
You're not kind of man I had in mind
With that Stetson,  boots and jeans
Exactly how much could a redneck know
When it comes to romantic things?

(lift)
Mama said watch for trouble like you
Cause men like you jus' can't be true........

(instrumental bridge)


(male vocal)
It's true we like to raise some hell
And God knows I've done my share
But when it comes to lovin' girl
Those city boys can't compare
They may have gone to ivy-league schools
And learned to make lots of cash
But let a bonafide redneck steal your heart
An' you'll tell 'em to kiss your ***




© Melissa Williamson 2008





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:Taz::Taz::Taz::Taz::Taz:STUPIDComp_Trash2:Comp_Trash2:Comp_Trash2:Comp_Trash2:Comp_Trash2: WRITER'S:madface:madface:madfaceBLOCK!!!



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Lissa,

This is awesome.  When you get her all polished up, she's gonna be a beauty. 

Hang in there - the writer's block will pass.   Smile, and breathe.  :P



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........:rollface:rollface:rollface..........I BLAME it on writer's block..........but I think the REAL problem is I'm overextended........LOL..........with LITTLE time for writing.   Besides dealing with the other half (who's disabled)..........an' the four year old goin' to school.........plus I have my Navy Bandit on leave........I'm still tryin' to finish some things in the new house.........all while maintaining some sort of sanity within this house .......ie clean laundry, clean dishes,  meals that have to be cooked...........

:danceface.........but it's gettin' easier.........shoulda seen me the coupla weeks I had to school shop too...........good thing I'm an insomniac huh?.........:bigsmile

I think this one has potential..........jus' gotta find the time to devote to it like it deserves.........:Thumbs.........thanks for the kind comments..........:laugh




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Just a thought I had while reading possibly a tag line or something, maybe just something to be discarded.........

I need a real life countryfried
kind that loves you the best
certified who walks with pride
big time bonified Redneck



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:cool:..........Jus' had a killer idea hit me when I was writing..........for the music for this one......but it'd be a challenge..........:?

Wouldn't this one be cool if the music for it had a contrasting feel to it?.........Kinda like leather an' lace?...........;)  Hmmmmmmmm...........Let me know what y'all think..........:D



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Miss Lissa,

Have you heard Gunpowder and Lead?  That's the feel I get with this one.  Smooth with an edge in the verse, kickin' booty in the chorus.  Check it out, you'll see what I mean.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xCd8Ig9RLqY&feature=related



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:D............Dear..........Miranda Lambert's one of my faves of the new breeds..........an' I LOVE her Crazy Ex-Girlfriend album..........;)..........it's very close to what I had in mind.........along those lines.........but more "conversational" between the singers.........:cool:

I guess the best way to describe it is...........I want the femal part to have a more naive sound to it...........whereas the male vocal in my mind should be more dangerous..........hmmmmmmmm.........kinda like Little Red Riding Hood and the Big Bad Wolf...........;)

I actually have a rewrite in the works.........but this week has jus' been CRAZY............:shock:



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