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 Posted: Mon Jun 23rd, 2008 04:48 am
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Jason Mento
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Red,

I'm so sorry for the delay on this.  I got stuck in my 9 to 5 mode again.  I hadn't picked up the guitar in 3 weeks.  I was going through some serious withdraw.  I'm really not liking my vocal on this one.  I wanted to get something to you so I posted what I have so far on SoundClick.  It's version 2.  If you're cool with moving this over to the other forum, let me know and I'll post it over so we can get more input.  I really like your lyrics so far.  Also, what name should I use for credit?  I want to put you in the copyright notice as well.  My only nit now is that I say 'baby' too much.  But, I'm too beat right now to go back and re-cut a vocal.

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It's A New Day
Copyright 2008 by Jason Mento

you've paved the same old roads into something new
never dreamed i'd find a love so true
girl, you know how to ease this troubled mind
i found my peace deep in your eyes

it's a new day, and i got you on my mind, now baby
i can't wait to see tomorrow
it's a new day, you know i never thought i'd say,
i can't wait to see tomorrow

the grass is greener and the sky a deeper blue
a brighter life is coming into view
my darkened world is filling with light
we can both dance in it tonight

'cause it's a new day, and i got you on my mind, now baby
i can't wait to see tomorrow
it's a new day, you know i never thought i'd say,
i can't wait to see tomorrow

the love you make me baby, feels so fine
i want to keep 'till the end of time

'cause it's a new day, and i got you on my mind, now baby
i can't wait to see tomorrow
it's a new day, you know i never thought i'd say,
i can't wait to see tomorrow


OOPS, forgot the link:
http://soundclick.com/share?songid=6657223

Last edited on Mon Jun 23rd, 2008 04:49 am by Jason Mento

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 Posted: Mon Jun 23rd, 2008 06:09 am
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Still a great groove. Not sure about the length of "end" in the bridge though - feels a tad prolonged. Otherwise very nice



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 Posted: Mon Jun 23rd, 2008 07:49 pm
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Jason,

This is all very exciting for me, you had a great groove going on when I heard this for the first time, and now to have been able to help bring it around by helping with the lyrics, makes me feel very fortunate indeed. If you want to include me in the credits, use Barry Williams, but like I said before, it's enough for me to have just been able to help contribute to this. I've had a blast doing this,

I hope your nine to fiver releases it's grip some so you can chase your sanity down with your guitar and keep some time for yourself.

If you think there are too many babies working, here are few ideas. Also I agree with RDM above about the bridge.

'cause it's a new day, and i got you on my mind, now baby
i can't wait to see tomorrow
it's a new day, you know i I never thought i'd get to say it
But i can't wait to see tomorrow


OR

'cause it's a new day, and i got you on my mind, now baby
i can't wait to see tomorrow
it's a new day, you know i I never thought i'd ever say this
But i can't wait to see tomorrow


OR

'cause it's a new day, and i got you on my mind, now baby
i can't wait to see tomorrow
it's a new day, you know i I can't believe I feel this way
But i can't wait to see tomorrow



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