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 Posted: Thu Feb 21st, 2008 02:32 am
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Here you go Barry, try this old music idea out.  Sort of Eagles-like.  It's not real good and I can't get to the orginal tracks right now to update it.  If you guys want to use it, I will try and resurrect it.
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Freezing in the Keys

© Barry Williams/ Danny Bloodworth 2007 

As I’m watching television
at our favorite tiki bar
I see it’s snowing where you are


The palm trees are softly swaying
a soulful guitar mans playing
a song that’s breakin my heart

He’s singing songs of love and laughter and of happy ever after’s
as young lovers go walking on the beach
of flowered shirts and sun burnt noses how happy hour here never closes
it feels like it’s freezing in the keys

As I watch another sunset
with white sand between my toes
I wonder where did our love go?


That red ball just hit the ocean
and I can’t help the notion
that this don’t feel so tropical

The warm breeze don’t help the aching my broken heart just keeps on breakin
oh it must be ninty degrees
and as my frozen drink is thawing I know there’s no use in calling
it feels like it’s freezing in the keys

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Mike, you posted an instrumental awhile back, I haven't been able to find it anywhere, but thats what we were thinking of while we wrote this tempo wise. I don't believe it had a name.

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Added the MP3 to your post above.

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Barry...Outstanding lyrics. I think You and Danny got a gem here. Roll with it Bro'.



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Love this guys!! :cool:



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This thing started in a conversation between Danny and I. I told him how cold it was here in Florida last November, and he was laughing at me telling me I had no idea what cold was. Then he said that would be a cool hook, freezing in the keys. We have been sending this thing back and forth via email for awhile now, but it's just been sitting for a month or so. So I figured I'd post it up for advise, on how to make it better.

To me this lyric just doesn't go anywhere. It's just a guy in paradise complaining at this point. Seems like it needs a destination, or maybe an idea of how this came to pass? I'm not sure, that's why I threw it out for discussion.

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I'll try to help.  This line is cool, but I think you could come up with a more important something:

of flowered shirts and sun burnt noses how happy hour here never closes



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Maybe something like:

reminding me of how we use to be

it feels like it's freezing in the keys



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I think you could do something else with this one:

that this don’t feel so tropical




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That red ball just hit the ocean
and I can’t help the notion
that you're freezing just like me



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Thanks Brenda those look like good ideas. I just feel it needs to make a turn or something somewhere. Reminding me of what we once had is a great idea. Something besides a beach bum whining. Thanks



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Well, Barry, broken hearts do whine.



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Hey, I agree with you Red - I think that's why we've been stalled on this thing for so long now.   What I wanted us to get to is that catchy something that sets up the Freezing in the Keys line.  I just haven't been able to find it yet.  I've always thought that the setup rhyme is "degrees" to offset the freezing in the keys, but the exact phrase eludes me.

Bren, those are some good suggestions.  We'll have to see if we can get them in there.  I like the "reminding me of how we use to be". 



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Barry and Danny, the guy is heart broken so I do not think that you can really turn that around with this one.  He's missing her and thinking that maybe she's missing him?



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I could see the bridge turning it around, with something like 

took a long walk down to our spot
where we watched the ships come in
Through the heat a sillouette appeared
And you were there in my arms again


The above is a little cheesy, but I think you could turn it around like that.



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Yes, that is really pretty!!!  He can find some comfort in his memories. :D



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Mike, No rush or anything, but if you still have this laying around, could you send me an mp3 of the music so I could load it into Audacity and play with it some? TandBWilliams06@yahoo.com would be the email addy if you can.



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Rewrite I'm working on.  Maybe I'll have it done in time for next winter.:D Maybe this should be moved to the works in progress?

Freezing In The Keys

 

Sitting drinking watching television

at our favortie tiki bar

I see, that it’s, snowing where you are

down here the palms are swaying

 a soulful guitar man playing

some songs, that are tearing me apart

 

as he sings of love and laughter,

 and of happy ever afters

All the things that now seems out of reach

In flowered shirts with our sunburnt noses

Seems happy hour here never closes

Oh it must be, ninty degrees

Without you, it’s freezing in the keys

 

that red ball just hit the ocean

I raise as glass full of devotion

Sitting, drinking, wondering, where did our love go?

The warm breeze don’t help the aching

My broken heart just keeps on breaking

a flame that hot, should have never, turned so cold

 

I keep on drinking, through the love and laughters

chase em with some, happy ever afters

as young lovers walking on the beach

I'm thinking back, to when it was, you and me

it makes it feel like it’s freezing in the keys.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Moved to Works in Progress forum.

MP3 is on it's way.  In case it is too large for youre email, I  have also sent it through YouSendit.com.  You will get a notice from them that a file is waiting too.

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Thanks Mike!



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