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 Posted: Thu Jun 9th, 2022 05:59 pm
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I found this old-fashioned song lyric written by Carroll Kiphen a few days ago in Facebook. I though it needed a simple, catchy, old-fashioned melody to go with it so I composed and recorded this track. I really like what it sounds like. But I sure wish I could sing better. Here is “Candle Light and Wine”.

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CANDLE LIGHT AND WINE

Verse
I struck a match and lit a candle
A soft glow filled the room
Like the halo round my angel’s head
Or big old harvest moon.

It had been quite a drive to get here;
A long, long way to go
But I wanted the peace and quiet;
A place for love to grow.

Chorus
Back here in the woods
Forgotten by time
You and I alone
Candle light and wine.
No interruptions
No one dropping by
Just the two of us
Candle light and wine.

Verse
I put some wood inside the fireplace
A bearskin on the floor.
I came looking for peace and quiet
But we found so much more.

It’s been a long hard road to get here
But love’s come back to us.
We just needed time
To find ourselves
And reestablish trust.

Chorus

Bridge
We reminisced for hours
Had a grand old time.
We fell in love all over
Candle light and wine.

Chorus

Lyrics: Carroll Kiphen
Music, instruments & vocals: Robert Baitinger

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 Posted: Thu Jun 9th, 2022 06:38 pm
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One of my favorites of yours, thanks to the chorus, which is, as you say, very catchy.

I would lose the bearskin. That's a bit creepy. It also makes it obvious that the lyric was written by someone old enough to remember when that might have been thought of as sexy. Now I can't get the image of Carroll on a bearskin rug beside a roaring fire out of my mind! LOL.

I have an idea for this line: "To find ourselves." How would it be if you broke up the syllables with a little gap between them as you descend the scale: "To find...our...selves." It would add interest to the melody. Just an idea - nothing wrong with the way you sing it.



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 Posted: Fri Jun 10th, 2022 02:01 pm
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Hey Gavin,
I’m glad you liked the song!

When my wife heard it she asked me: “Who has bearskin rugs in front of their fireplace theses days?” and my son looked at me and asked “who still uses the term “grand old time””? You know, I guess it’s exactly these little things that make Carroll’s lyrics so interesting. Here in Germany, they’d say it’s so old-fashioned that it’s iconic, hip or cool.

Thanks for your suggestion. I’ll try it out.

All the best
Robert

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 Posted: Fri Jun 10th, 2022 02:22 pm
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I suppose I’m sort of a relic myself at this point. I’m sure the lines could be changed.



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 Posted: Fri Jun 10th, 2022 02:22 pm
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I suppose I’m sort of a relic myself at this point. I’m sure the lines could be changed.



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 Posted: Fri Jun 10th, 2022 02:44 pm
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Well it does say
To a place lost in time.



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Nice treatment of a solid lyric.
The pre-chorus and chorus are both great.

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