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What you did i'll never do
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 Posted: Wed May 11th, 2022 06:54 pm
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What you did I’ll never do

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No one is ever truly alone.
Though sometimes it feels that way
Reach out take a hand, tell someone.
I think we all want to be saved.

Pre chorus
A stone thrown in a pond
Sends ripples beyond.
Even when you’re long gone.

Chorus
Some feel betrayed by the choice you made.
You only thought about you.
In a way you may have just saved me.
What you did I’ll never do.

Verse
I’m angry with you for dying
And I’m not the only one.
You cut short a life full of promise
With one shot from a hand gun.

Pre chorus
A stone thrown in a pond
Sends ripples beyond.
Even when you’re long gone.

Chorus
Some feel betrayed by the choice you made.
You only thought about you.
In a way you may have just saved me.
What you did I’ll never do.

Verse
If you could look down from heaven.
You would see eyes full of tears.
They are for you, they are for you.
We’re all wishing you were here.

Bridge
Your parents would still be angry
But you’d know they love you.
I’d cuss you out then I’d hold you
Cause that’s what good friend do.

Pre chorus
A stone thrown in a pond
Sends ripples beyond.
Even when you’re long gone.

Chorus
Some feel betrayed by the choice you made.
You only thought about you.
In a way you may have just saved me.
What you did I’ll never do.

Last edited on Wed May 11th, 2022 10:39 pm by RainyDayMan



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 Posted: Wed May 11th, 2022 10:44 pm
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Nicely done. It's a tough subject to write on.
I think you've captured that mix of emotions: sadness, loss, anger, betrayal and lack of understanding.
But without it being so tortured that you wouldn't want to hear or possibly sing it.



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 Posted: Wed May 11th, 2022 11:30 pm
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Thanks. Grandson’s friend took his life last week.



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 Posted: Sat May 14th, 2022 11:59 am
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Some nice lyrics here. I was especially taken by the pre chorus. I think maybe the bridge:
"Cause that’s what good friend do" should be "friends do" plural but only a small niggle. Sorry to hear about your grandson's friend. How tragic :(

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 Posted: Sat May 14th, 2022 12:53 pm
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Thank you



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 Posted: Mon May 16th, 2022 03:32 am
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Hi. Sorry for your loss...

I will just throw out one thing. The 2nd and 3rd verses are ABCB but the first verse is ABCD. Find a way to rhyme the 2nd and 4th lines in the first verse.


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 Posted: Mon May 16th, 2022 12:12 pm
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Way and saved are a close enough rhyme



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 Posted: Mon May 16th, 2022 12:12 pm
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Way and saved are a close enough rhyme



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