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Your love isn't lost on me
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 Posted: Thu Jan 13th, 2022 04:13 pm
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CK
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Your love isn’t lost on me
Verse
I’m rough and tumble I fumble for words.
What do you see in me?
You’re sweet and pretty a pity I’m not.
You’re much too good for me.
Pre chorus
Thank you for being wonderful.
Thank you for being kind
Thank you for bringing me laughter
Even in difficult times.
Chorus
I know I owe you I just want to show you.
Your love isn’t lost on me.
Your love, your love, your love isn’t lost on me.
Verse
I’m tough but humble I stumble thru life.
Unsure of who I am.
You’re smart you’re funny oh honey why me?
Why not some other man?
Pre chorus
Thank you for being wonderful.
Thank you for being kind
Thank you for bringing me laughter
Even in difficult times.
Chorus
I know I owe you I just want to show you.
Your love isn’t lost on me.
Your love, your love, your love isn’t lost on me.
Bridge
My heart, my soul, all that I own
They all belong to you.
I want you to know I love you.
Show you my gratitude.



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 Posted: Thu Jan 13th, 2022 09:56 pm
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Nice! It's a beautiful sentiment, and I like those internal rhymes. I think it should sing well. :)



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 Posted: Sun Jan 16th, 2022 01:01 pm
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Slightly saccharine for me personally, but I do like the "I know I owe you I just want to show you" because it's always nice to have words prior to the end of the line rhyme. I would have liked a bit more specifics about why they're so amazing rather than the more generic "funny" "pretty" stuff.

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 Posted: Tue Jan 25th, 2022 10:02 pm
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I gave this one a try and here's what I came up with. Feedback is always appreciated.

https://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=14375717

All the best
Robert

http://www.robertbaitinger.de

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