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https://www.reverbnation.com/mississippirivercrooks/song/28243362-that-devil-from-memphis
That Devil From Memphis
Darrell Wallace copyright 2020
I picked up the pieces when he left you all alone
I put you back together again and gave you a good home
I raised your kids like they were my own
They never did without and they were never alone
Now that Devil from Memphis thinks he’s gonna take my woman away.
That Devil from Memphis thinks he’s gonna take my woman away.

You said yourself, that bastard’s no damned good..
He never treated you right, did he baby? Like a gentleman should…
He couldn’t hold a job, he gambled every day
Lost all your money, more than he could ever pay
Now that Devil from Memphis thinks he’s gonna take my woman away?
That Devil from Memphis thinks he’s gonna take my woman away..

(Bridge)
He’s no damned good, just no damned good
He’s no damned good, just no damned good

You told me all about how he’s mean and big and bad
He carries a .45 pistol and got a temper like a dog gone mad..
That Devil ain’t gonna take my wife, long as I got a breath and this switchblade knife,
That Devil from Memphis ain’t gonna take my woman away.
Oh no..that Devil from Memphis ain’t gonna take my woman away.

Don’t waste our money on flowers Baby, don’t waste your tears…
It ain’t something worth crying about, I’ll waste away here for years…
I got blood on my hands while sit in this jail
I did what I had to do and they won’t set no bail…
Now that Devil from Memphis ain’t gonna take my woman away
That Devil from Memphis ain’t gonna take my woman away
That Devil from Memphis ain’t gonna take my woman away.

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Wonderful blues sound.
Your voice suits this style too

Bit of a tragic tale, but it makes for a good song!

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RobbinCrooks - I really enjoyed your song.  Great sound and story telling.  Just one possible suggestion is shorten/tighten up the bridge somehow.  I wanted to keep hearing the story and the bridge took away some of the momentum of the song. Just a humble suggestion.  I hope it turns out to be a case of self defense!Peter


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