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Richard Cliff
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https://soundclick.com/r/s89ogd

Vocal & Production Mike Zaneski. Words & Music JRC Vaughan

CASUALTY OF TIME ,(REWRITE)

V
Barley swayed in golden waves
as far as my eyes could see
as if showing me the distance
separating you from me.
V
We loved, we fought, cried and tried
but it could never be
Ev'ry dance was our last dance
then we parted finally
C
Like summer flowers
become casualty's of time.
Beautiful while they last
but only fleeting by design
We were a casualty of time
A casualty of time

V
Tried to think where you are
wherever you could be
Wonder if you feel this pain
or are you happy to be free

B
I've play our song so many times
You are that misty rose
too lovely to forget,
too beautiful to be alone


C

Last edited on Mon Oct 11th, 2021 07:48 am by Richard Cliff

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I didn't know Mike was from the UK! :)

I can easily hear a female cover of this in my head... NICE

Richard Cliff
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He isn't, he's US based but worked on about ten songs with me, the wonders of the net!
Cheers JAPOV, pleased you liked it. Its getting a female vocalist though, but yes it would be good
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This is lovely. The words, music and vocals are all beautiful.

One possible idea is to change Finally to gracefully?

Ev'ry dance was our last dance
then we parted finally >>- gracefully

Richard Cliff
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Hi Andrea
Thanks for the listen, gracefully is good.
The hardest point is getting Mike to work on it sadly that's not possible now as he's moved on.
Regards
JRC

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Richard Cliff wrote:
Hi Andrea
Thanks for the listen, gracefully is good.
The hardest point is getting Mike to work on it sadly that's not possible now as he's moved on.
Regards
JRC


So sorry for your loss. I loved the song as is. It is very beautiful :)

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Lol
He's not passed away just doing other things

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Richard Cliff wrote:
Lol
He's not passed away just doing other things


That is good to hear :)


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