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Rain or Shine
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 Posted: Mon Apr 5th, 2021 02:12 am
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Lane
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https://soundcloud.com/user-745253707/rain-or-shine

Rain or Shine
v1]He was never one to waste His time,
but then His whole world disappeared.
The little girl He loved so much, would never come home again.

v2]The signs and pictures on the store front doors, have mostly faded
away, sometimes Her face takes me back
to Our younger, brighter days.

chorus
Dad came home from work that day
He was never the same man.
He sits on a bench He built for His girl... bows His head,
Rain or Shine..

Bridge:
All of the love
will never bring them back again
you keep a heart wide open,
love is always going to win.


v3] Came as no suprise to me
when We laid him next to Her
I said a prayer....and said good-bye

chorus 2
Dad came home from work that day
He was never the same man.
He sat on a bench He built, for his girl...
bowed His head...Rain or Shine..
tag:
through those years...Rain or Shine..

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 Posted: Tue Apr 6th, 2021 05:13 am
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That's a sweet song. Nice melody and finger picking.
I think it holds together well. The "Rain or Shine" is only loosely woven to the story but it still works.

You might consider switching "little girl" > "girl"
when I first heard that line I thought it was referring to his daughter, but after that it seems more like his wife.

I'd try dropping 'The' and make it:
Signs and pictures
to give it a little more room there
and if you wanted an internal near rhyme you could try:
store front windows
but doors sounds good as it is.

Enjoyed it! :)



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 Posted: Wed Apr 7th, 2021 04:25 pm
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RainyDayMan, how are you?
been sometime i`ve been around thanks for taking a look and commenting. when I sang that part it was a little tricky, a little crowded at the lyrical point so that might be a great Idea. I`ll try it. hope all is good in your world.



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