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JayDub
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Wrote this one around a guitar riff this morning. Not exactly an example of profound lyrical depth; just an old-school, crunchy guitar-driven, up tempo drinking country song:
She Ain't Comin Back
©2021 Jake Randall
She kept on tellin' me
I was gonna have to change my ways
But I just kept on goin
Never thought I'd see the day
That she would pack up all her bags
Walk out and slam the door
Now I'm sitting here in an empty house
And she ain't comin' back no more
Chorus:
I know Jesus is coming back like he said he would
I know Saturdays out on the lake
With ice cold beers are good
I know Coca Cola tastes just fine
But it's better with a little bit of Jack
But the surest thing I know
Is she ain't coming back
The night she'd finally had enough
I was three sheets to the wind
Came draggin' home in the middle of the night
Couldn't even tell her where I'd been
She peeled out and left me standing
In a cloud of dust and tail lights
I went on in cracked another open
Said everything's gonna be alright
Repeat Chorus
Solo
Repeat ChorusLast edited on Tue Mar 2nd, 2021 02:39 pm by JayDub
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| Posted: Tue Mar 2nd, 2021 01:06 am |
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JayDub
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RainyDayMan wrote:
Works for me! Chorus looks particularly strong.
Nice write!
Thanks so much!
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| Posted: Tue Mar 2nd, 2021 04:04 pm |
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Everything you've posted here is really solid, and this is no exception. I think you have a lot pf potential. Have you ever tried to publish?
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Disclaimer: I am a beginner! Take any advice from me with a grain of salt because I probably don't know what I'm talking about!
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| Posted: Tue Mar 2nd, 2021 05:37 pm |
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JayDub
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Taylorm260 wrote:
Everything you've posted here is really solid, and this is no exception. I think you have a lot pf potential. Have you ever tried to publish?
I truly appreciate the compliment, Taylor! To answer your question, no I haven't. I don't do lead vocals so I've never been able to sit down and knock out a demo. If I'm being honest, I don't have any idea how to even begin the publishing process.
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