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So You Want To Break My Heart
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 Posted: Sat Jan 16th, 2021 02:10 pm
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derrickhand300
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I also have #TylerChilders singing this in my mind to the melody of #FeatheredIndians
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_lsran_Slzc
Its supposed to come across as a guy DARING this heartbreaker woman to "try and break HIS heart" In the end she is in over her head

So You Wanna Break My Heart

(Verse)
So you wanna break my heart
Where should we begin?
Wanna take it slow?
See if we can be friends
We can light some candles
Turn the lights down low
Put on some soft music
Maybe Barry Manilow

(Chorus)
So you want to break my heart
Let's give it a try
Be sure and wear something sexy
That's sure to catch my eye
Let me catch you lookin
Then flash me a smile
Walk right in front of me
After a just little while

(Verse 2)
Wanna go real fast?
Jump right in the sack
We can shower in the mornin
Then I 'll take you back
That pretty dress you're wearin
Would look good wrinkled on the floor
Find the "Do Not Disturb"sign
We can hang it on the door
I can rub your shoulders
We can shed some clothes
Do it again next evenin
See where it goes...

(Chorus)
So you want to break my heart
Let's give it a try
Be sure and wear something sexy
That's sure to catch my eye
Let me catch you lookin
Then flash me a smile
Walk right in front of me
After just a little while

(Bridge)
I can see me takin' you home
Taste your sweet perfume
Lights are off, candles flicker
A soft saxaphone fills the room
We can dance a slow one
With little movements we'll undress
Kisses across your shouder
Until they reach your neck
Fingertips drawing soft circles
In the small of your back
In my arms I feel you shiver
Pulling you closer as you relax

(Chorus)
So you want to break my heart
Let's give it a try
Be sure and wear something sexy
That's sure to catch my eye
Let me catch you lookin
Then flash me a smile
Walk right in front of me
After just a little while

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Last edited on Sat Jan 16th, 2021 02:10 pm by derrickhand300



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 Posted: Tue Jan 19th, 2021 02:10 am
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I like where this is going. I think you've got the seduction part down fine.

I feel like the chorus needs a bit more attitude. In the last two lines circle back with something along the lines of: but if you want to break my heart you'll have to try real hard.

But it all reads very smooth.



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 Posted: Tue Jan 19th, 2021 02:48 am
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RainyDayMan wrote:
I like where this is going. I think you've got the seduction part down fine.

I feel like the chorus needs a bit more attitude. In the last two lines circle back with something along the lines of: but if you want to break my heart you'll have to try real hard.

But it all reads very smooth.


Thanks!- I will work on it- s always I greatly appreciate it
Wanna break my heart?
Better get your game face on!

Ive also changed

Tastin your sweet perfume
to
Tastin' your sweet scent

As I felt when writing it that the perfume reference has already been used to much in the past

Last edited on Tue Jan 19th, 2021 03:09 am by derrickhand300



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