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| Posted: Wed Jan 13th, 2021 11:01 pm |
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RainbowKeeper
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Almost no words needed. Planed as a pieces that gets more and more speed with every line till it reaches it’s climax and starts all over with half the power.
Eternal Grace
One part of my brain still sings this song A‘
A part of my soul walks through the room
Where we’ve laughed, where we’ve cried, where we’ve smiled
Still hear his voice and smell her perfume
My eyes turn wet, I’m afraid to speak
Afraid to lose it, through all my grief
Ashamed to show how deep I am hurt
Ashamed of calling death a damn thief
But no matter how long I‘ll wander through life
No matter how many souls I will meet. B
No one can ever take your place
And no matter how long I’ll wander through life
What ever I’ll do, say and see
The love you gave me can no one erase
So there is only one thing left to do
Let you go to the eternal grace
God’s eternal grace
My heartache still takes away my sight. A+
This silence is still hurting my ears
But I know you will stay by my side
Through all my struggles and all my fears
My mind turns blank, what’s left is to feel
To go through emotions and mem‘ries
And let go of all the pain inside
Until you and I will find peace
And no matter how long I‘ll wander through life
No matter how many souls I will meet. B
No one can ever take your place
And no matter how long I’ll wander through life
What ever I’ll do, say and see
The love you gave me can no one erase
So there is only one thing left to do
Let you go to the eternal grace
God’s eternal grace
Solo. C (crossing climax)
And no matter how long I‘ll wander through life
No matter how many souls I will meet. B
No one can ever take your place
And no matter how long I’ll wander through life
What ever I’ll do, say and see
The love you gave me can no one erase
So there is only one thing left to do
Let you go to the eternal grace
God’s eternal grace
My eyes turn wet, I’m afraid to speak. A*
Afraid to lose it, through all my grief
But sat down to write this little piece
While praying that you two find relief
In God’s eternal grace
© by Ian P.
13.01.2021
W by Ian P.
for: VB
Dedicated to Herry and Köky... I love you both!Last edited on Fri Jan 15th, 2021 12:52 pm by RainbowKeeper
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| Posted: Fri Jan 15th, 2021 01:40 am |
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Hi Ian,
This is so touching. The emotions are strong in these lyrics. It feels so personal so I hate to suggest any changes.
But, These two lines jump out at me:
"Where we’ve laughed, where we’ve cried, where we’ve smiled>>-- This is very long. Maybe it could be shortented up? 'Where we've laughed, We've cried, We've smiled - or 'Where we've laughed and cried and smiled'.
Still hear his voice and sent her perfume">>- I think you mean scent here. To keep the same meter - 'Still hear his voice and smell her perfume'
It is beautiful Ian. God bless 
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| Posted: Fri Jan 15th, 2021 12:42 pm |
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RainbowKeeper
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Oh yeah thanx Andrea .... scent...was the word there. I wrote it in the original lyrics on paper but I guess my phone got once again mad at me for switching languages when I typed the lyrics to post them here.... and if u don’t check twice.... 😅 thanks! I’ll change that asap. Atm we are all searching for the right photo for the funeral....ufff...and I fell last evening so that my arm hurts. But well....doesn’t matter atm. Tyvm for your feedback!
RK
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