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 Posted: Mon Dec 21st, 2020 05:39 pm
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Sitting on a bar stool
in a Nashville bar called “Turn the Page”
Man with a Gibson case
Walked in and past me to the stage

Opened it up and pulled out.
Beautiful Gibson J Forty Five
Ran a pick down the strings.
And man did he bring that place to life.

Sang Margarittaville
Then Willie, Alan Jackson and Strait
Then sang Eric Clapton
Let me tell ya man he was great

Then he snapped his case shut.
Filtered through the crowd and out the door
Some of us followed him
Wasn’t a nobody anymore

He sang Margarittaville
Then Willie Alan Jackson and Strait
Then he sang Eric Clapton
Let tell ya man he was great

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 Posted: Tue Jan 5th, 2021 01:09 am
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Nice start, but it's missing something, I think you might want to expand this one a bit



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 Posted: Tue Jan 5th, 2021 02:58 am
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I agree and thanks



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 Posted: Tue Jan 5th, 2021 03:25 am
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Well
I LOVE IT but agree it needs more of THE SAME!

Honestly- when you followed him out the door I expected him to disappear- like an aberration or ghost!

I REALLY like the idea that this unknown was actually a ghost Guitar player from the past! :)

The whole vibe from what you have written0 to me is kinda "eerie" like David Allen Coe and THE RIDE :)

"He was dressed like 1950's-half drunk and hallowed eyed.."

Anyway its awesome- id like to see more too it
...still thinking....maybe an early verse describing the mans appearance-
... then towards the end



Then he snapped his case shut.
Filtered through the crowd and out the door
Some of us followed him
Wasn’t a nobody anymore


Then he snapped his case shut.
Filtered through the crowd and out the door
Some of us followed him
(but they opened the door and there was nothing but street lights on an empty street)

Would be cool if all the great singers you name would have already passed:)

Last edited on Tue Jan 5th, 2021 03:33 am by derrickhand300



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 Posted: Tue Jan 5th, 2021 01:54 pm
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i like those ideas. Chet Adkins maybe, I'll mess with it a bit



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i like those ideas. Chet Adkins maybe, I'll mess with it a bit



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i like those ideas. Chet Adkins maybe, I'll mess with it a bit



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derrickhand300 wrote:
Well
I LOVE IT but agree it needs more of THE SAME!

Honestly- when you followed him out the door I expected him to disappear- like an aberration or ghost!

I REALLY like the idea that this unknown was actually a ghost Guitar player from the past! :)

The whole vibe from what you have written0 to me is kinda "eerie" like David Allen Coe and THE RIDE :)

"He was dressed like 1950's-half drunk and hallowed eyed.."

Anyway its awesome- id like to see more too it
...still thinking....maybe an early verse describing the mans appearance-
... then towards the end



Then he snapped his case shut.
Filtered through the crowd and out the door
Some of us followed him
Wasn’t a nobody anymore


Then he snapped his case shut.
Filtered through the crowd and out the door
Some of us followed him
(but they opened the door and there was nothing but street lights on an empty street)

Would be cool if all the great singers you name would have already passed:)


That's the direction I thought it was going, too! I totally got a "The Ride" vibe from this. I think it would take it to another level if he was some kind of guitar icon from the past (Chet would be a great one), who still wanders the streets of Nashville trying to bring back the "old way." Something as simple as "Some us tried to follow him, but we didn't see him anymore" could take it that direction.

Also, when I hear or write songs that reference artists or songs, I like when the choruses mention different people or songs. For instance, the first chorus has Margaritaville, Willie, Alan Jackson, Strait and Eric Clapton. Maybe the second chorus could use a different song and four different artists? That may just be personal preference, but I think it would paint the picture of this guy who walks in, blows the crowd away and plays a long set that people couldn't get enough of.

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