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The only thing worse than lawless reprieve
Are those who would celebrate sin in the streets
In defiance of spirit, the horde takes a knee
And gnaws at the hand of God's liberty
When truth is for sale, and all hope is gone
When hell's generation will not hear this song
If right was still right, and wrong is still wrong
How does a common man still carry on
The heart of this old man has beat for too long...
When Jesus said, "They know not what they do"
He forgave the priests and the Romans too
Do you wonder today what He will say to you
Since that two thousand year debt is now due
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| Posted: Tue Dec 15th, 2020 05:03 pm |
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I like it. Can you come up with a chorus and add a hook? I think a one or two line chorus repeated would work well.
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| Posted: Wed Dec 16th, 2020 03:56 am |
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Hmmmm... How about...?
If liars and propagandists didn't
repeat themselves ad-nauseam
I wouldn't have to hear the word
democrat so often
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| Posted: Wed Dec 16th, 2020 10:14 pm |
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I would keep the democrats out of it. Keep it general so it fits more than one line of thinking.
Bow down and pray
Rise up and revolt
God's words show us the way
If it's time to fight -> ??
Let us fight, the good fight
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Someone should lockdown the Whitehouse
It's full of snotty little brats
Covid is going to kill us all
With rats, bats, and democrats!
Yeah', perhaps I should "unplug" lol... 
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| Posted: Thu Dec 17th, 2020 08:59 pm |
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Just leave the bottle please
Some peanuts and a glass
Let me drink till I'm blind
And fall on my ass
A toast to love that can't possibly last
Just leave the bottle please
My wife is a Democrat
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| Posted: Fri Dec 18th, 2020 12:20 am |
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I am not sure we are on the same page. Do you want to work on this lyric? Does it need to be about democrats vs republicans?
There is a bigger moral lyric here about right and wrong, good and evil, but I am not interested in the politics.
Remember this - all presidents have a lot of help. They do not run the country themselves. This country survived many unnoteworthy presidents. If you are not a fan of Biden, it will still be ok. He probably won't run again in 4 years.
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OMG - stay away from FOX. I repeat - stay away from FOX!
I am working on something else tonight, but will see what comes tomorrow (no hidden message here 😉🤣).
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Context is important for lyrics like this. It would play extremely well at the VFW, not so much at open mic night at Applebee’s. Audience is key.
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| Posted: Sat Dec 19th, 2020 07:57 am |
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BRD wrote:
Context is important for lyrics like this. It would play extremely well at the VFW, not so much at open mic night at Applebee’s. Audience is key.
"Audience is key..." Lol, I definitely hear that! Could you imagine me playing that at a subway station in Boston?
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