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BeatlesFan64 Member 
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I still need to add a couple more verses to this, and a bridge. https://www.dropbox.com/s/ls4o9f8nebaz6sp/A%20Girl%20Like%20You.m4a?dl=0 A Girl Like You (Refrain) Thoughts and dreams and things unseen Flowing like an endless stream That’s the only place where a girl like you Could ever love a guy like me (Verse 1) Each time I see you passing by I can’t help but get lost in your eyes Why must I feel the way I (Verse 2) do, ‘Cos I know you’ll never look up and see At his window, lonely as can be The one who really loves you (Refrain) Thoughts and dreams and things unseen Flowing like an endless stream That’s the only place where a girl like you Could ever love a guy like me |
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RainyDayMan TSF Administrator 
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I like the chord sequences you are using here. The refrain is particularly good. I like the verses too, but there are a couple of spots that feel a bit squished like: I can’t help but get lost in your eyes do, ‘Cos I know you’ll never look up and see I think they could be smoothed out, maybe: I get lost within your eyes do, I know you’ll never look up and see Worth pursuing! |
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BeatlesFan64 Member
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Thanks RDM, I'm glad you liked it. I recorded this demo probably over a year and a half ago, and I never really got back to it. I was hoping I could possibly get some input here on how to proceed. I like you ideas for making the lines shorter, in retrospect, I was definitely squeezing every last inch and then some haha. I think I want to make at least one new verse, maybe two. And I'm still stumped as for bridge chords at the moment. |
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Billy_Lunch_Money Contributor 
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That's nice. I can hardly wait for you to finish it! |
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JAPOV Member 
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Here's what I do when I'm stuck... I set lyrics / music completely aside and just write an explanation, like an in depth advertisement for the song. I would explain lines like "guy like me" and "dreams an things unseen". In just plain dialogue, set the stage for a potential listener in explicit detail. Tell the story. Generally, doing this helps me get all my thoughts in one place, and usually I'll be inspired just by thinking creatively  |
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